Callision Vs Syn I KILL
 

ANYBODY WHO READS THIS
what the fuck happened to MERKING KING


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You spit first

Usual rules no prewrittens no biting or feeding
No crew hate or dick ryder votes


This my check in and good luck

ok i'm new to this so I would like feedback

I got enough rhymes to feed the needed**I put guns on ya head till you start to get heated**and then they start ta spark ya**I don't pistol whip no more cause I gotta rocket launcha**i'll cut off ya knees and run around to taunt cha**Rhymes rude leavin deluged blood in ya food**you couldn't "BARE" the hurt if you
were NUDE**in an instance ya rhyme book is flamed and ends your existence**flip and hassle ya rhymes in battle**scattered cattle eat ya carcass and make ya soul rattle**leavin blood puddles, provin to everyone that Synikill is softer than Cuddles**I eat niggas whole cause there's no need to chew**you couldn't stomp me if youhad timbo boots**My text speak loud like bright colors**makin Synikill go hide in his covers**deliverin rhymes to infect ya organs, messin up ya focal to the point of distortin**importin rhymes to export ya mind**i'm like Tony Hawk always on the grind**you'll be cooked like a pork rind**no evidence left to find,jus a sign of defeat**and marks from where ya head leaked**

u wanted feed back so heres my veiw
i really found it hard to read cuz u writin all in one big block of writin and as i did start to read it i couldnt feel cuz it was way to hard to feel the flow

U think Syn I KILL lack punchez??..watch me Level-in-dis-Fool'z-Chest/
Demonic jeanz??{genes}..nah, U just a DEVIL-in-a-Blue-DRESS///
i'm Severin-dis-Newb'z-Best spitz..ya' Beef Cakez??{verses}/
are pure BULL..my Publishings "clear" Houses and "Sweep"-STEAKZ////
with Discreet BREAKZ dat "strip" U 'til ya' BARE-Rhymez-Captured/
Expose--Your{exposure} "thinning" remarkz replete with HAIR-LINE- Fractures///
Unprepared-Mindz-Plastered on monitors..Slain-in-10-secs/
ya' LUNGS composed of Plexi-Glass..when Syn "sprayz"..ya' Wind'z-Decked{Windex}///
a product of Gayz-and-Incest..U spit HOMOGENOUS Blood Linez/
This is Spinal Tap ..my HEAVY METAL "rockz-n-rollz" on to Flood SPINEZ///
wit Snub(Nose) .9'z dat crush ya' Cerebrum until da Strandz Pop/
imma 'Seasoned' Veteran..'dis New Chef is servin' up Bland Dropz{rhymez}$$
i'll bury U in da Sand Box..SYNIKILL DISband glocks and rock spots//
i "break" YOUNG GUNZ up Literally to Land Shotz///
aimmed at 'dis Man'z Knot..spread Diseases until ya' Glandz Rot/
it'z ova "K"..da Fat Lady'z "singin"..squealz to da Band Stopz///
Declarin' ya' INDEPENDENCE on paper da way U Hand Cockz///
of every JOHN, Tom, DICK-n-Harry..'dis Prick-is-Wearied/
from battlin' SynikILLS tabloid im penning ya obituary///
"Steal a Victory"??..my Tonez-be-Stark{TonyStarkz/Ghostface}..these WALLETS' Bulletproof/

compared to yourz..my lyricz Biblical..Sonnetz-be-Fulla-Truth//
i "cooked" ya' GOOSE and "carved" 'dis TURKEY up nice to Send-my-Peerz/
Flagrant FOWLZ..who can't end rhymez right..let alone End Careerz-----Don't even Bother duke You were ok But i think im gonna puke

WOW typing that makes ya fuckin fingers cramp like a mother fucker


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bit ovious hu won syn he had every think callsion didnt
nice spit syn

could u go and vote on my 2 battles aswell vote truthfully safe

UPPN THIS SHIT

Hit it up and drop a link


I vote on so many fuckin battles thatsz why my post count is so fuckin high

http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?s=&threadid=71074

ok dee tha link if i get a few more post around ill come back n vote

Sorry to freepost...........

Synikill clear your pm box


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yo taktik nice sig lol

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http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=69558

^^^ please vote there for me voting here... thank you. need to get that battle closed!

Callision -

-no that great of intro... kinda basic lines.
-need to work on structure
-kinda simple punches
-battle and cattle are the most rhymed words by newbie rappers...
-only saw a couple personal diss attepmts

SyniKiLL-

-nice opener
-good multies and good personals
-good structure
-well done metphors and multies throughout the verse
-it is obvious the skill level here...

Vote: SyniKiLL

yo im back to vote ive allready explained................

syn cainded hiz ass....................
vote = syn

Merking King was banned again.....because he lost a pinkslip battle a while back as another name....and they found out that it was the same dude...so they banned him again.....anyway....Callison....u had some tight shit homie....didn't expect nothin like that from u....but ur punches were kinda weak....and u used paragraph (EWWW)......just fix ur structure up...and divide ur shit into bars....and i think this would'a been close....but Synikill had some mad ass multis....and some tight punches.....so he took this in my opinion hands down.....keep up the good work the two of u.....

peace
4:20

Uppn^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^'
2 more votes hit this up close it and drop a link
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Uppn 2 more for the KO

hook it up close this shit

HOLLA
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