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UNSURPA$$ED 08-07-03 12:49 AM

Sick and Tired
 
Sick and Tired

I am sick and tired of all these people on my shit
And if you dont like me, y'all can suck my dick
I dont judge you people, so why judge me
Man you mothafuckas need to get shot in the knee
You need to quit takin shit so serious
Man im so confused, lost, and delearious
You say you dont care, but you really do
Bitch, you'll never get close to bein my baby boo
If ya feelin' what im sayin, holla at your boy
And if ya dont, well...you'll be destroyed
Why do you want me to change for you honey?
Oh...I get it...you just want my money
No, im not surprised...i can see it in your eyes
But i will have money till the day of my demise
If ya dont want your face shoved in the dirt
I suggest you take off your mothafuckin skirt
With the ice on the wrist, i am gettin very sick
Thas somethin you dont know, thas some pimp shit
Nasty Nati, I be holdin it down
I have bitches followin me, justa cleanin my crown
I could go on and on bout my lyrical blessin
But i figured i'll take out my gat and point it in your direction
I'll kill you any day with my words
And as I drive by, i'll flip you the bird
Being a lyrical magican, is what i desire
But dogg, i'm so mothafuckin Sick and Tired...





Any comments.........feel free
Jus expressin my mind
Nasty Nati

Peepers 08-07-03 04:41 AM

uuhh, it was aight, aight

er, flow was awfully weak, your rhymes were very forced, you can tell cause you used words like "shit" and "dick" to rhyme
be more creative with word use, dont just settle with the easy words to rhyme with

cotent was weak also, you didn't really talk about somethin interesint, emotion wasn't there and the went off subject at the end

keep rhyming, and keep peeping ill people's peices

peace

UNSURPA$$ED 08-08-03 02:13 AM

holla at me

UNSURPA$$ED 08-08-03 03:09 PM

c'mon y'all
hit me

west 08-08-03 03:12 PM

descent for a newbie dawg,aight.

UNSURPA$$ED 08-08-03 03:27 PM

thanks dawg

WORD~PERFECT 08-08-03 03:31 PM

hungry yes
harsh attacking yes
creativity needs work
ability decent
delivery worth reading
over all you havnt found your angle yet but you have found you have talent not keep it hitting and refining yourself and you will be great.

UNSURPA$$ED 08-08-03 09:32 PM

thanks dawg
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