TOPICAL: Amend vs. Sureal
 

We Agreed On 15-30 Line Limit..
Shits Due Tonight..

Topic: Invisible..

Good Luck :confused::)

Invisible...

Staring Into Space, Life Non-Existent..
Stars Reachable By Mind, Yet So Distant..
A Mystic World Of Thoughtfullness Surrounds..
One More Useless Mind, Yet So Profound?..
The Rich And The Poor, In My Eyes All Even..
Purpose On Earth, Something To Beleive In..
People, One Day May Change This World..
Fill It With Hope And Glory, Left Unfurled..
People Entangled, In Worries And Strife..
All For One Thing, The Meaning Of Life..
I Look Around, All My Worldly Possesions..
All I Own, Simply Used For Self Expression..
I Am Lost To All Eternity, For Sorrow Dwells..
Please Read My Book, For The Truth It Tells..
Love Torn, Trust Lost, Lessons Learned..
I Show People Love, But It's Never Returned..
When All Else Is Lost, They At Least Have Me
But I Am Invisible, Love's Lost In Travesty..
The World Is Falling Apart, I Once Hated It..
I Will Not Turn My Back, For I Created It..

-Sureal

Edit: Spelling

InvisibleEverything



Am I Your Neighbors Kid - Neglected And Spoiled
And Again Another Unseen Success In This World
Or Am I The Slow Swirl - Decreasing Life's Quality
Ironicly - Created By A Board Of Civil Right Policys
Life Follows Me - But Im Not The One For Attention
So Maybe Im The Quite Guy That Hides All My Tension
Am I A Wife's Suspiscion - Or The Husbands Guilt
Its Funny How Trust Can Make Loved Ones Feel
Too Numb To Feel, Un-Noticed - Not Seen By Care
So Im The Loner That Believes Dreams Arnt There
What Seems Not Fair - Only Becomes Normal Days
Im The Forgotten One That Never Learned The Way
Am I The Baby - Cut From Life Before I Even Merged
Or The One U Let Die When Your Cheek Was Turned
Seemless Turns - Eyes Focused, But Still Not Seen
A Concious You Had When Stealing That Guys Jeep
Lie And Cheats - The Convicted Felons That Violate
The Kid Who Shot At His Mother And Just Got 9 Days
Look At The Crime Rate - Politians With Big Pockets
Im The Thought Debates Are Just There Rigged Topics
Forget Logic, Im Meant To Be - But You Wont Notice
Cause That Would Be DeMeaning And So Out Of Focus

wow. just wow. from both sides this was dope.


Sureal

you had flow, vocab, creativity...the works. your whole piece was an enjoyable read all the way through. the twist at the very end was just the icing on the cake..

Amend

you were actually more creative than Sureal was i thought...and your piece was an enjoyable read as well. i never thought that you would be this good at topicals..but at some times you seemed a little too basic and forced it too much..



im going to have to vote for Sureal but give props to Amend...you went head-to-head with one of the best topical heads here and almost pulled this off...


good job fellas

vote-Sureal

damn this was straight up hot like devils shit. both had a nice spin on things.

Amend: dawg i was feelin ya flow bigtime man, that would make a good audio. ya concept was good, sorta what most would use though. ya took what is social invisiblity and worked it like that. it was a good verse and like i said, the flow was killah


Sureal: damn, u had the best spin eva, like i didnt really get it much till the end. I was like wow (even though im an atheist) even christians ignore their god. u had maja creativity and definately the best ending. ya flow didnt touch amends but im not goin go the flow here, im goin for concept and creativity


vote=Sureal for creativity and a mind boggling ending

props to Amend fo a hot flow and a good verse, its just that ya creativity wasnt quite there dawg

uppin this 0-2
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THIS WAS ILL NO DOUBT

SUREAL BROUGHT SOME DOPE SHIT

DUREALS ENDING GOT IT FOR HIM

AMEND BOROUGHT DOPE SHIT BUT COULD have been a lil more creative

VOTE SUREAL

if this is for pinkslips i think it should be cancelled.....for the fact
that amend got alot of talent in battling...and now that i see....
topical also......this was a great battle.......i was impressed by
amend becuz i never seen his topicals...sureal...u came dope as
usual.....i'm not voting...just stating that amend isn't like these
other newbs who doesn't bring anything to the site except for
pure wackness.....this should just be counted as a regular battle..

Nah It Wasnt For Slips, We've Agreed On It Before Battle
And I Dont Do Topicals Cause There Wasnt Much Comp On RB, Cept For Sureal. Good Verse Dawg, I Maybe Could Of Done Something But I Felt Like I Was Floating Off Topic On Some Lines, Plus You Did Have A Pretty Good Ending

Vote=Surreal

nice punches and meta's

liked the ending, it was mindblowing

good shit frum the both a u

can ya'll return the favour please

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=71762

u never seen me topical huh?

Amend Admitted His Defeat...

-Sureal Wins.!
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