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graffik nature vs feeble minded
lol.
go. stop duckin. u said ud spit last night. _________________________________________ i dont care who u beat. beat me. . 20 max. dont go over or i aint spittin. come wit the way stretched shit and that goin over. |
oh, shit he cant battle here.
this is elite. fuck sry but this set it up urself grffik in front lines. |
im tight with postin here..... x frost did it when he didn't have 4 wins or 100 posts... and if we did it here there wouldn't be any newb votes... i have my verse done but i want to know if ur down for battlin here
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u forgot to post the rules we agreed on
10 lines no hate, d/r, or crew votes no feedin 5-0 is ko 5-?=win and i dunno how much pull u got here, so i'd like all votes explained multis- G/F flow- G/F disses/personals- G/F punches- G/F wordplay- G/F fav lines- "line" by G/F overall vote- G/F 19 minutes of writing time If you’d try sharin-yah-vapor you could stop grippin-yah-nines/ It’s like “im tearin-yah-paper” cuz “this pen is rippin-yah-lines!”/|… Hmm maybe I shouldn’t-gang-wit-feeb cuz he couldn’t-bang-wit-G/ We could be “medieval convicts” and “u still wouldn’t-hang-wit-me!”/|…. See kid death is the only remaining-border and got saint’s-clutchin-weed/ N’ I should get “yah ass a restraining-order” cuz “yah shit ain’t-touchin-me”/|… N’ I’ll bust-a-move-,-crack-yah-back and I must-aprove-,-that-the-fact/ Is that I “don’t need tah consult mad man” just-tah-“prove-,-that-yah-whack!”/|… see-the-pole-bleedin-oddly-shaded red, feeb-yah-old-even-thog-he-stated/ You can “forget about hair cuts” cuz “I’ll leave-yah-whole-freakin-body-faded!”/|… if u don't understand something feel free to pm me about it and i'll happily explain good luck playah |
well untill he shows can i get some feedback on this verse?? if these are the vets on this board i'd like to see their opinion of me
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HOLY SHIT THAT WILL BE EXTREMELY HARD 2 BEAT.............................................. ..............
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maybe feelbe has a good chance tho........
even tho that cat had sum ahrd hittin multies an punches |
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what would u no about wins...lol u got none nice spit i'll vote when finshed |
hmmm.... he claims i ducked above
*awaits his verse* cmon playah post some shit ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ |
feeble did u drop
i wanaa see more of ya heat u had sum pucnhes in sic wit its battle strate up ill as fuk i think i can hang\ but whos droppun |
Damn that shit was good..................................
Props to ya Graffik nature but yo wheres' Feeble at? i dont think he'd duck he's not like that |
feeble is here...
sry peeps was at my dads... will drop tonight........................................... ..................... g'luck yo/ |
oh yea.
ya best believe..that feeble has more than a good chance.. oh and only italicize shit thats actually a punch. u italicized shit about consultin mad man to prove im wack. wat? is that a punch? |
i'll close this battle quick & leave ya votes as small as ya wins. .
marry mother NATURE to mr. loss. . i can see uve fallen for him! lol shitty style ya use. . 1 punch with a hundred italics and dashes. dont make W's. . all NATURE creates is power outage & flashes! force me to lose? like the radio stations. . he'll never make FM! hate-to-send. .he kidnapped brendan & still couldnt take the end! i'd love to stay & shed light on nature like rays from the sun. . but the W's stay blank like where he say where hes from! posts-ignite natures course disturbed. .he aint supposed-to-bite! sig-name is casper. .cuz he always asks a friendly ghost-to-write! lol. ok. explanations: line 1: he has no wins. he'll have no votes. line 2: duh! i thought it was funny u prolly will 2 lemme know. line 3: he used italics& dashes where they werent needed line 4: hes named nature. . real life nature creates lightning flashes and power outages. line 5: FM is the radio frequency (duh) and hell never force me to lose or make it on FM radio. line 6: the end is site admin& named brendan. he cant take the end of my rap its too much. i know you all wanna read more. lol line 7: "shed light on nature" in rap means teach him how to rap. in nature is sunlight. duh dipshits. lol line 8: his "from" place under his name is blank. line 9: duh. line 10: IN HIS SIG IT SAYS ONE OF HIS NAMES IS "KASPER". CASPER HAS A MOTTO CASPER THE FRIENDLY GHOST ^^^sorry for the explanations but i know some are stupid. and some may not have seen or heard of some of the references made. cookie.^^^ plus i had personals and punches in every line cept one. he didnt lol. VOTE UP FAIRLY NO U.T. MEMBERS MAY VOTE. oh and i just edited...a correction to theexplanations that was really confusing... |
Graffik
If you’d try sharin-yah-vapor you could stop grippin-yah-nines/ It’s like “im tearin-yah-paper” cuz “this pen is rippin-yah-lines!”/|… blah, played but sorta hit Hmm maybe I shouldn’t-gang-wit-feeb cuz he couldn’t-bang-wit-G/ We could be “medieval convicts” and “u still wouldn’t-hang-wit-me!”/|…. 1st line was ASS, 2nd kinda nice actually See kid death is the only remaining-border and got saint’s-clutchin-weed/ N’ I should get “yah ass a restraining-order” cuz “yah shit ain’t-touchin-me”/|… blah all around N’ I’ll bust-a-move-,-crack-yah-back and I must-aprove-,-that-the-fact/ Is that I “don’t need tah consult mad man” just-tah-“prove-,-that-yah-whack!”/|… 1st blah and 2nd was descent, not a hard hit see-the-pole-bleedin-oddly-shaded red, feeb-yah-old-even-thog-he-stated/ You can “forget about hair cuts” cuz “I’ll leave-yah-whole-freakin-body-faded!”/|… blah finisher . . . Feeble i'll close this battle quick & leave ya votes as small as ya wins. . marry mother NATURE to mr. loss. . i can see uve fallen for him! lol yea it was pretty nice, plus a lil bit funny shitty style ya use. . 1 punch with a hundred italics and dashes. dont make W's. . all NATURE creates is power outage & flashes! 1st was blah 2nd kind hit force me to lose? like the radio stations. . he'll never make FM! hate-to-send. .he kidnapped brendan & still couldnt take the end! 1st was blah, 2nd hit kinda nice i'd love to stay & shed light on nature like rays from the sun. . but the W's stay blank like where he say where hes from! LOL 2nd line, nice flow too posts-ignite natures course disturbed. .he aint supposed-to-bite! sig-name is casper. .cuz he always asks a friendly ghost-to-write! blah finisher, kinda hit OVERALL Feeble TookThis For Having A WAY Simpler Structure But His Punches Hit As Hard And Even Harder The Graffik, And Graf, Using Italics Like That Really Doesnt Look Good. A Punch Is Better When The Reader Figures It Out Themselves, Not When U Highlight It. Think About That Next Battle U Have, Cause U Aint That Bad At Text. Descent Battle All Around And The Votes Feeble |
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