death do us part (full)
 

this shits been a long time coming, but ive had personal health problems so getting on has been hard any way heres the shit :

Death Do us Party

Women are leeches that stick to u suck u make u happy,
wen the realastionship goes down they just dont see,
the pain they cause, rippin out our hearts,
but really now lets be real their all fuckin tarts,
Now to i give u what im feeling for a certain women right now,
Bitch u just dont see, how u hurt me, every time we had a row,
dont u get it I hate u, if i had my way slit ur throat,
end ur dreams, burn my ties & sink ur familys boat,
let them swim in the tears they weap,
See now u made love on me only skin deep,
im no longer the guy that was cool & all 2 clear,
im now a guy who in a bad mood you need to fear,
confront me in that mood, 2 minutes & ur body outta here,
i aint playing no more games mother fucker,
try to treat me like a bitch & ill kill u like a sucker,
the last rhyme i put out feelings is now evaporated,
im glad on that track i never let u be my collaberated.

fuck u dont u get it my mind rages,
could have been togeather ages,
but no u made the choice to abort,
carry on n ill make ur life short,

the thing is im frustrated this is spur of the moment shit,
but even when my anger warn off ill still think u a 2 bit hit,
u ask me to tell you if anything goes wrong i say fuck that,
if i die its your fault you brought me to this, clap clap of the GAT,
Im dont even know y im doing this cuz u jump dick 2 dick,
loving it, suckin it, fuckin it, if you yapping once more head to brick,
if i see u & him the street my actions will not be counted for,
ill kill him & string u up, my minds that of a killer, fuck the law,
you wont win this one I esure you, like an insurance company,
wen ur realationship sinks dont think u can come jump on me,
10 months of love ended by just chuck it down the drain,
feels like u just chucked my body 2 an on coming train,
but you know the funny shit is? ive just begun,
i sworn to my son, funny thing is this is my first one,
this shits comical like jim davison live on stage,
& wen ur engaged, im gonna kill u with rage,

fuck u dont u get it my mind rages,
could have been togeather ages,
but no u made the choice to abort,
carry on n ill make ur life short,

TO SIMPLE BUT A GREAT EMOTIONAL READ ALL IN ALL YOU DID GREAT SEE LINES THAT COULD F USED MORE COMPLEXITY BUT HEY WE ONLY ELIVATE THIS WAS GOOD TWIN HOLLA AT ME

^ thanks dog

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hahahahahhahaha this is suck's ass

ur a fag^

anyway....
piece was lacking in complexity and the flow was choppy...need to link up the lines better
story was good...feeling what the topic was about
had some nice lines in there....but if u tidied it up with a smoother flow and some vocab and complexity would have been alot nicer
keep workin on it

^ u fingerassin urself while lookin at tekken 3 characters

lol u say this sucked look @ urs ass hole, i dont even think urs rhymed.

^yo dicklees nimrod..u wear cowboy boots and u live in england...need i say more?hahahahaha

yo i was liking that quite a nice peice there to be fair to the other guy the flow was a bit dull in places but no were near wot that nigga was bitchin bout....... i also like so of the word play used and the creativity was nice but just think bout the flow peace out.

it was lackin some stuff but the story was straight the flow was ight so basically i'd give u a 7/10 keep spittin dogg

good to see mods bann pricks like him, any ye flow well its not my strong point what can i say :E (cheeky smile)

whak, str8 played done before blah blah blah

lol right he only says its played cuz he aint had it done 2 him!