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whatever u wanna call it..
soon to be audio..just need a beat..might have my girl sing the hook for me..but yeah..enjoy..
U mutha fuckas just don’t know how I feel.. Sit and question all my people cause I don’t know if they real.. All my scars from childhood aint never been healed.. So retract ya statements when u tell me to calm down and just chill.. I got pain bottled up, all my struggles for years.. So understand my troubles, when u see me swallowed by tears.. Been hallowed by fears, so I follow bottles of beer.. They got they own problems, so y look to my peers.. Don’t give a fuck about my father, so y even bother.. Like im live n life in a labyrinth how im constantly toggled.. Even stars in trouble, so who after should my life be modeled.. Aint got a reason to live, fuck pride, my whole characters been swallowed.. Got a confession, none of my lifes steps have ever been lessoned.. So I question my methods, and keep request n my blessings.. Im tired of stress n, lord please just put me to rest quick.. Y should I continue to breathe when ive never been respected.. Please don’t tell me u feel me and understand my pain.. The difference between me and u is im still struggle n today.. U walked through light showers, im stuck in acid rain.. Ya river runs smoothly, while blood is flaccid in my veins.. Tussle n in my mind like I cant make a decision.. Been paint n lyrical pictures in my head descriptive of prisons.. Got a knife in my hand ready to make an incision.. Slit my wrist, cut my throat, im that guy nobody il be miss n.. Y u trip n, say im slip n, momma please just calm down.. Y u care if im in the ground when u was never around.. Pound for pound im a loser, voice roars loud wit no sound.. Don’t bother to contact the law cause I don’t wanna be found.. Y hug n me now, I put the gun down, all of a sudden u proud.. Before it was like I had a muzzle over my mouth.. Now people wanna hear me, when I literally wanna move down south.. If u didn’t know me then, really don’t know me now.. My girl left me right at the lowest point in my life.. Shit aint right, thought u was supposed to be my wife.. Now I sleep lonely, pillow filled wit tears at night.. But I cant just let u go, so I wont give up the fight.. Lil kids see my pain, tell n me it’ll be okay.. But I don’t see no way, heart gets pushed away.. Feelings left astray, the world, I left today.. I cant deal wit all the struggles, the stress, the pain.. Noth n my life is right, so I constantly walk left.. I no longer feel bad, be n upset is what I expect.. Clothes wet from tears, I stay wonder n whats next.. Never really seemed to no god, like im satans best pet.. Now ive dried my tears, got my lies to cover my fears.. Tell n myself im rich, that’s y I buy all these bottles of beer.. Throw the throttle in gear, might as well shift up a few years.. I know whats next, its hell on earth, and im stand n right here.. |
replied to like 6 ppl lastnight..still get noth n..
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damn..cause yall kids aint seen my name before yall dont even look at my shit..
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dog that shit was deep, i liked it, shit kinda sounds like my life, werd up
nice drop homie----STAY UP!!! |
VERY CONCIOUS YOU COULD EASILY SWAY A PERSONS THOUGHT WITH YOURS THAT IS A TRUE GIFT I WOULDNT CHANGE THIS AT ALL
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The way it flows it will probably be a good audio. I didn't understand a couple of the lines(See bottom of post) I liked the overall theme. I ain't a mufucka but son i feel ya pain. Also did you write the hook in there or was that the three verses? I felt this piece and give it a 7.5/10. Keep ya head up! 1
Like im live n life in a labyrinth how im constantly toggled-didn't get how you were "toggled in a labyrinth. Ya river runs smoothly, while blood is flaccid in my veins-not sure if blood could be flaccid I might be wrong though. So understand my troubles, when u see me swallowed by tears.. Been hallowed by fears, so I follow bottles of beer-been there done that......... Please don’t tell me u feel me and understand my pain.. The difference between me and u is im still struggle n today-i feel this right here the most. |
thanks for the replies..and in reply to prohpit..blood be n flaccid..nope..lol..that was for flows sake..and the labyrinth line..the game 'labryinth'..dunno who all might have had or owned 1..but i did..where it was like a lil maze wit holes in he board..and u shook it back and fourth to get to the end..wit out fall n through any of the holes..
but yeah..again..thanks for the replies.. |
i know a lot o u simple minded ppl cant read somethin this long wit out break n down..but yeah..can i get some more replies..
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yo, it had a nice flow, simple vocab, but that was replaced by a nice depth, the vocab just made it easier to understand.. I liked it.. work on imagery... u had some, but it could have been portrayed a little better... peace..
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Yo i liked this,simple,effective,straight to point,good flow,nice simple vocab,good message,liked it dawg.
Peace |
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