1st open mic///personal experience*
 

miss her 2 this very day. cuz i loved but lost her 2 her decision/
couldnt forgive her, cuz she turned her back and her pleeds 4 giveness was clearin my vision/
but i never new that she was lyin 2 me so we could get back together.
but wat she did was disrespectful and i will hold this 2 her forever/
she was older and made me happy, even her voice gave me chillz..
but we had 2 break 4 a bit....and months later i found her 2 be on the pillz..
i thaught we never......so that must mean that she had other relations..
but wen she told me ive already broken and ive lost my patience..
i blew up at her 4 everythin i ever 4 gave her 4 like the weed/
but although friends said no i couldnt let go cuz she is everything i need/
so everyday i wait..4 hope of her letting go over her dirty habits/
there was no sign of her showin and already i was sinkin into hellz pits/

chorus*
lookin 4 u baby.
u treated me bad but maybe.
forgivniss is near..
but cant speak with mouth full of tears*

so days got slower but still past bye...now i was growing angry and hateful.
friends where noticing and although they cared i knew they where growin grateful.
but they never understood.. that she was pretty and had the best smile.
i decided 2 call her up and rlly give it 2 her..but all she said was ur actin like a child.
mabe she was right but it didnt matter no more cuz i just lost the one who i cared 4/
the next mornin she called but just like an angry young guy i slammed the door/

chorus2*
turnin my head in disgrace.
cuz u i could not face.
forgivniss was groin faint
cuz my head was full of hate.


months past by withought a trace, but i decided nothin we be good if i keep this shit going
and nite by nite dreams of her became sweet again and i felt that love growing.
i finally decided 2 call her up and give her the word that i forgive.
she screamed with joy and told me without u i dont know if i woul have lived..
things were gettin better but friends still said no shes never gonna quit smokin.
so i asked her abou it and she said no....but i found out the hard way. she must have been jokim.
tears swelled in my eyes i ran home and cried 4 hours...locked in my room grieving.
i knew i still cared 4 her...but was 2 far away now and just the other day i heard she was leaving

now its over and done....shes gone 4 good..... never again will i see her face and lov her the way i did..

chorus*
she is gone 4 life*
if things were good she would have been my wife*
but life will never be the same..
cuz in the love life...i just lost the game*

UPPIN THIS .....COME ON PPL TELL ME WAT I GOT GOIN ON....THIS IS MY 1ST EVER OPEN MIC....DID I DO GOOD?

damn man im feelin that, that was nice if u get a fast beat added to that u could make that a song

INDEED IMPRSEEIVE INTRO I WILL KEEP AN EYE OUT FOR YOU
I WENT THROUGH THAT MUCH AS ANY MAN AND IM SURE WE COULD ALL RELATE

thanx u 2......tru.......thanx 4 the tip poster.....


still uppin this shit

^^^^^uppin that

wat do u all think

it wuz coo work a lil on the vocab cuz its a lil simple but other than that it wuz a nice piece overall.

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I can relate dawg,good all round vocab and good flow,on tha whole a good drop,keep it up.

Peace

i get pussy an dump pussy so i couldn't relate to me sounds like a pussy whipped guy crying over some ass dat was getting tapped while he was wit her(probably by me) but i guess in a way its allright somebody's got to be a loser an if u put dat shit on an album youll get so many losers buying it because they can relate
you would finally have enough money to get what ever girl u want maybe even ya 9 timing cock gobbling quick to spread her legs girlfriend back

wtf was that bullshit................man come an talk trash..wen u can get shit 2 back ur pansy ass up.....fuck off....stop talkiin bout rapiin ur sister...atleast my shit isnt in the family lil fuck...

lol dont listin to him, listin to me, it was a good peice simple but emotional and i like emotional peices cuz thats the same shit i write i like it man, cant nesecary (or how ya spell it) relate cuz ive been with the same girl for a long time but its cool nice peice and keep it up, yo i jus posted a peice called IM STOLEN if ya could check it out and give some feedback i would be graceful