slow down - e-motion in words
 

Release-n-Tangles Speak Trials and Trivalations Till my mind Peaks-n-Angles...
Streaks-n-Stables Cause im over tha top and pushed to tha wall like Breaks-wit-Tables..
Fights-n-Fabels I strike pens to match so my lyrics are hot like spikes-n-Wavers...
Scripts-2-Lazers Pushing Stability to Minimal like Trips-2-Skaters...
Crack-wit-Basers I seperate my brain from luv like Rap-wit-Spacers...
Intrapt-tha-Majors till my pry-or-itys are outta wack like Poor-n-Wagers...
Tore-ur-Favors Taking my share of tha pie Any witch way or Even-Flavers...
Intense Heat-2-Fold My minds Fragil wit age Seeps-2-Mold...
Please-tha-soul Im trying to overcome my Fears like Spearits-n-Bold...
Heart-of-Gold Denseness Releases Anger Till Feelings-tend-to-Fold...
Putting a End-2-old Like Winning soccer Im destind to Defeat-My-Goal...
Losses-2-Uphold I stay nagging at ur heat like Arteries-Caraode...
Invert-tha-Pours Im getting off tha street like turnd Fait-4-Whores...
I-Open-Doors Then Spit Acid to reign Landing u in-tha-moruge...
Death-2-Forge Inseep n Release to put needles-2-Gorge...
Heat-Grows-Colder But I indice my soul to live on like a Dead-Soldier...

okay thanks for the No feed back~ ya kno i apperciate it

its ok...

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I know the lonely feeling too. *bursts into song "ALL BY MYSEEELLF"..*..

Hmmmmm.....

I didn't dig too much into this piece. It seemed like a personal piece of exploration. Exploring yourself and letting rip onto paper in a profoundly abstract way.

A kind of self analysis, a dark and 'realising' one. You got quite an atmosphere going with it.

I did enjoy reading this piece. And in a way, it did play some deep chords within myself.

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Be patient with replies. It's a chilled place...

Not bad...I liked the multi's...but
I don't usually see them in poetry....
it seemed more like an open mic...
but still...it was really well written and
I liked it...

thanks for the feed back ~!!

hey the piece was good but not great, i could feel some emotion throu it and at some parts i felt i could relate, im not sure thou it some of the pictures i got when reading it were what you meant but everybody sees it different right, it was different and all and all a good poem keep it up

i like it becuz it leaves ya mind skattered