Phrantik vs. Ill-Mental
 

Check In: Tuesday.

Verses: Thursday.

Alright, The Rules...

16-48 Line Limit...

No Bullshit...

Topic: Missing In Action

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I'll prolly no show.
100 characters is needed so i
am writing this stupid bullshit....
blah blah blah blah blah blah

Lets start out... with a picture... dusty and old-
worthless to a strager, but a family's story it told\
It was a picture of a man, very tall, very strong-
had a perfect life, perfect family, thought it could never go wrong\
The man's name was Ryan, in the Navy at the Private rank-
he wasnt captured by enemies, and no.... his ship never sank\
He had a wife, who was pregnant, when he decided to join-
he decided he wanted to see the world, that was out side of Des Moines\
His wife begged him to stay, but his mind was already set-
but he never knew that this would forever be, his one and only regret\
He got to see the world, china, africa, and brazil-
but after he got back, he realized that his life was not fulfulled\
By now his son was born and grown, and he had never seen his father-
Ryan dreamed his son would run and hug him, but he didnt even bother\
His son had no idea who this shady figure in the doorway was or what he wanted-
Ryan knew who the boy was and could see he was unwanted\
He gave his wife a kiss and said that he had to leave-
he hated himself for not knowing the child he help concieve\
Ryan went out to the car, where he had all his navy things-
he had his clothes and his uniform, and his gold weddin ring\
He still couldnt believe he didnt know his own son-
so he unzipped his bag, where he also had his gun\
He walked in the house to his son, and found a bit of satisfaction-
he shot his son and him self in the head, so the boys father would never be missing in action\

your lucky i showed up.
hahaha..


a 9 to 9, blowin your mind, got your bitch dancin
but its the coffee grind
cant take what they say, your lost in a crowd
your the quietist one around, but your talkin aloud.
you feel them there but they dont understand
a bitch is naggin you to fund her band
only when they want, and need do they show up
and they've become so pathetic you want to throw up
but persona is everything, you remain undercover
cant hold hands without bein labeled a lover
a job of high risk, everyones watching but no one cares
no body's looking but everyone stares
a place where death brings a sweet satisfaction
and to be in heaven is like missing in action

it was an aight battle, phrantik.....this would have been a good battle if you aint have to rush your ish

ill-mental: rhyme scheme- 7, flow- 6, story- 9, total- 22

phrantik: rhyme scheme- 6, flow- 8, story 5, total- 19

ill mental gets my vote, nyce verse......but tha end through me off..... he shot his son too, lol, peace, 1

Tik was laid back on this one.. Ill Mental came nicer than expected
and i thought tik was okay but naht as strong mental.. Tik
Flowed better but the story line of mentals was better..
Therefore..

Vote - Ill-Mental

your pathetic if you think i tried.
i dont care for this league.
i wrote my verse in less than 4 minutes.
hense the length. and, its still
better than a lot of rb. rb is wack... so i
wont pay attention or waste my time on this league.
0-2 for ill-mental. up.

^^^same thing i did......... didnt think i had a chance in this one............ thx for the win i guess

ill got this, I know both keyed their verses and the flow and shit wasnt there really in ills but the story and the concept was definately there and that is what got it for him. Twisted endin was great too

ill=vote lol

Phrantik if you dont care, lol, dont act mad......if you really just keyed your ish for kicks....you cant be mad when you lose, you should have just no showed ....you could have saved that terrible verse, lol, and so what if rb is a joke, your out in tha first round of a tourni located at tha joke site.....what does that say, peace, 1

^number one you embarassed yourself
by callin the league a tourny.

number two, im not mad that im losing im mad
that kids, think i tried. people know what im
capable of. i would have ran ill like a fuckin dog
if i wanted.

number three, go hang yourself.

Vote: Phrantik

'Cause Im Tired Of People Voting For The Other Guy :)

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Why Even Sign Up?

^ Because I Asked Him Too. .

He`ll Do Better Next Week.

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