Amend vs. Baxter D. Wall
 

Check In: Tuesday.

Verses: Thursday.

Alright, The Rules...

16-48 Line Limit...

No Bullshit...

Topic: Rain Drops

yes! thank you guys for letting me in...i really appreciate it.


anyways...

im in.


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Rain Drops
In The Heart Of Storms, Darkness Mourns - A Tear Is Born
What It Departs Is Torn, Beautifuly - Your Fear's Adorn'd
Spirits Warn Of The Forming Mass, We All Know The Signs
When Light Darkens, Wind Blows, Mixed With No Sunshine
Unknown To Time, Un-Predictedly Falls On All Thats Under
In Aw And Wonder, Its Speaks With Loud Raws Of Thunder
Lost In Summer, Tired, I'd Let Rain Drops Rock Me To Bed
But In Winter Its Death, Dead, And Embody'd With Dread
Everything Under Man's Control'd, But The Weather Is Not
Just Drops, That Once Created - Falling Together Abroad
If Its Shown Flight It Cant Stop, Just Pick A Spot To Land
Better The Lost Life Of A Drop, Then Giving Not A Chance
Caught Off Glance, But Alot Is Missed, - Dark Shutters Day
A Chosen Path Of Un-Certainty To Just Find Another Way
Puddle's Of Life, Unseen By You, I Have Brought To Frame
Trouble Strife's And The Scene Construe's: Drops Of Rain

**KEYED**

i dont have the time for it..stupid homo Purple Haze



Jamal sat in tears as Brandon slipped into critical,
2 strikes against him, employed..his life was pitiful
turned 16..dropped out..tired of the monotonous tendencies
at war with the world, good looks and intelligence werent in his weaponry
seemed to find mischief effortlessly, it never found an end
lived a life of near solitude, betrayal and treachery deprived him of friends
Jamal and good deeds didnt blend, lack of a significant other left a gaping whole in his life
But Brandon was there for him...throughout all the tribulations and strife
Jamal stayed all night, he was reluctant to leave his side
went to the restroom only to return to find he had died
tears flooded from his eyes, this was his best friend..he thought hed never stop..
fell with the energy of a waterfall...held Brandons hand as they hit his head as soft as Rain Drops...


bah.....

this was actually a good battle. Amend had the flow and wordplay hands down, but story wise Baxter actually interested me. This was a tough vote but overall Amend gets my vote. This was still a good battle. peace.

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yeh im afraid amend took this
better imagery and a more polished verse
however baxters was a bit more interesting....but lacking in substance due to it being keyed

Its Deadline Time, Whoever Has More Votes At This Time Will Be
Declared The Winner.. But i Will Not Edit The Poll To Fuck Up
Battle Records...

So Amend (1-0)
Baxter D. Wall (0-1)

Good Luck To Both Of You In The Following Weeks To Come