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State Apart (Ireland Addressed) - West,Rythmic Tendencies
State Apart
Rythmic Tendencies - No-one On The Outside ... Knows What It’s Like... We’re Just Patiently Waiting ... For The Next Terrorist Strike... Even Though We’re The Same Blood ... No-one Is Alike... Everyone Outside Thinks ... That Everything’s Alright... But We’re Constantly Struggling ... Against Political Might... More Deafening Gunshots ... Someone Else Is Dead Tonight... But We Stay Polite ... One Day We’ll Find Our White Knight... We Did What Was Right ... Wanting To Stay With Britain... Look Up The Ireland Act - There! It’s Written... But We Still Have ... Our 6 Weakly Protected States... Too Bad Both Communities ... Couldn’t Be Mates... Just Look At The Trouble This Unholy Dividence Creates... Failed Debates, But We Just Keep Carrying The Weights... Heavily Issued Are Our Tax rates, But We Jus Keep Living, To See The Golden Gates... We’re A State Apart - We Were Always A Failure ... From The Start... But I Know This Country, Even In 6 Parts ... Will Always Remain In My Heart... Chorus Issues must be addressed,lies and wrong doings confessed,laws and de-armourment stressed/ for a chance for people to finally have what they desire,tha oppurtunity to survive,live there life then peacefully retire/ West - On tha news we hear of tha I.R.A and tha U.V.F,organisations that are rippin Ireland apart from tha inside,soon they'll be no Ireland or Uk to fight for left/ Gerry Adams tha leader of tha political party known as sien fien,in terror and chaos they reign,thousands of innocents over tha last 100 years in Ireland have been slaign/ Northern and Republic are in seperation,cease to fire but many instances have ended in reperation,more dead,more innocents lost through militarisation/ Britain try to keep an army presence in tha Irish streets,over tha years theres been many,defeats,retreats,and deceits,but life is so precious cannot be refunded with receits/ it's about religion catholic and prodistant are tha two choices,tha devil rejoices,people are so caught up in god they forget bout family and other peoples opinions and voices/ fightin against own country members is dire,brothers and sisters locked in constant cross fire,how can youngsters even try and aspire to be somethin better when peace is still required/ 1972 and bloody sunday was a day of disgrace to tha entire world and tha nation,souls of tha dead will live in eternal unrest and damnation,while tha murderers will always be held in high condemnation/ gorilla tactics and nail bombs used frequently by terrorist outfits,while we worry bout Saddam and Ladin we forget bout local hooligans tryna use violence and make illegal profits/ guns and illegal fire arms creating a surge in organised crime,more and more people are recruited to sign,while innocents are picked on and tha target time after time/ tha 6 states have no golden gates,jus mutual hate,violence maps there phates,brothers and fellow countryman in constant debate over politics yet they can't find space to not descriminate/ these issues have to be addressed,documentation and Act's already have stressed,but to progress all tha hate must stop and tha Irish nation must not relapse and ultimately degress/ Chorus Issues must be addressed,lies and wrong doings confessed,laws and de-armourment stressed/ for a chance for people to finally have what they desire,tha oppurtunity to survive,live there life then peacefully retire/ |
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i liked this one it was very deep and it made a good clear vison in my head thats wha make a good piece cus if u dont put a picture in the readers mind it gets a lil borin but u guys didnt do that props 2 u guys im out holla
my fav parts gorilla tactics and nail bombs used frequently by terrorist outfits,while we worry bout Saddam and Ladin we forget bout local hooligans tryna use violence and make illegal profits/ Just Look At The Trouble This Unholy Dividence Creates... Failed Debates, But We Just Keep Carrying The Weights... Heavily Issued Are Our Tax rates, But We Jus Keep Living, To See The Golden Gates... |
Re: State Apart (Ireland Addressed) - West,Rythmic Tendencies
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there was originally i dont know why it didnt show
but here goes again rhythmic your concept of reality using history and the present to your wordplay with discriptive dialect made your verse just plain blaze.it taught me of what was happening there and what caused the events that is perfect rhyme. west though a diff rythm from RT was jus as strong using names to add more strength other then then that i believe this song was without flaw even the hook got me......i didnt realize what was happening outside my boro you woke me up to your societies mad props 10/10 |
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Not a bad piece, you handled the topic nicely, flow could of been a little better in West's verse because he went for the more emotional / imageric side and his flow was a little hard to catch, Rhythmic came off slightly better, his verse opened it up nicely, good flow, nice imagery, good word chocice and the writers voiuce element shone through in this.
Nice coolab guys, reply to my piece: http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=73796 |
Uppin,yo thanks so far for tha feedback peeps.
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i liked your shit man, good stuff. like the way you have rhymed your words and made it easy to read through. some deep shit dogg. keep it up man
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Thanx dawg.
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yooo, west dawg... that was a VERY political verse, I was feelin' it on the real, got the idea across, stuck to the topic.. had an a'ight flow considering the words you were pretty much forced to use.. Rythmic, your verse wasn't as good, but I still liked the flow, the political aspect was there throughout, but you didn't go as in depth as west did... very constructive piece bro's... 1
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