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IlluGin613 08-18-03 02:59 PM

Bitches pt.1
 
They Aint NO fuckn good ... this is a song i wrote after my bitch fucked around wit my boy....

with the way things are going , ill live the rest of my life not knowing
not growing , staying on the bottom , never showing that deep down inside
all the hate and envy is killing my pride. it hurt when you lied , denied , ya neva even tried
only thing you eva did was cried but it couldnt subside the painful feelings , all of the times i coulda died , but held my own and took the shit in stride. all beef aside , lets talk about you
you say i wasnt a good man but bitch thats untrue. the only reason i was trippin is cuz i wasnt wit chu. but meanwhile you bounced from guy to guy like a fuckin kangaroo , so thanks to you
i dont trust bitches after what you put me through. i dunno what i got myself into
but fuck the bitches now i roll with my crew. so the only thing i gotz left to say to you
is thanks alot bitch and merci beaucoup.
how can i go on in this life not knowing which turns to take? doors to open? choices to make
my mind is shocked , its all beginning to shake , hurting my ego like a mental earthquake
i made 1 mistake but bitch for fuck sakes how many is your ass allowed to make?
you say my love wasnt real it was all a plot , but i think mine was for real yours just was not
proof to this claim is my last birthday you forgot, all this frustration has my cerebelum in a knot
thinkin alot , smokin pounds o' pot , drinkin so much i think i got gut rot
but its the only thing that can take my mind off this cheap shot , your words dont mean squat
cuz every guy in this town knows your fuckn g spot
Hoe , Skank , Bitch , Slut I Know All The Words To Say But You Know What?
id ratha juss keep my mouth shut , cuz the sweetest revenge is the feeling ull get in yer gut
aw shit what a kick in the butt , you want pity? juss kiss my left nut
im at the end of my patience this shits now uncut , your a bitch , a mutt , i finally got a reason to strut. Im rid of yah now so i dont haveta suffer , the benefit of this shit is its makin me tougher , smarter and that much rougher. it made me ready to rumble like michael buffer.
i hope ur happy with my boy , thinkin its pure joy but guess what troy? have fun and enjoy
cuz she dont luv you worth shit man its all a decoy till she finds a new fuck you juss a lil toy
you juss the latest busta that she gonna annoy and the latest heart shell try to destroy
but get up outta there before its too late , her greatest trait is the ability to trick ya into thinkin shes your soul mate , that shes great , but lemme give you the info and help to translate
the fact she aint shit shes only dead weight.
so get ahold of yourself bro and dont make the same mistakes i did yo
cuz i know this hoe is only for tha bling and for the dough
get her on the flo' den check her head to toe make a judgment and let me know
cuz the only thing im sayin is dont trust her hell no
youll see for yourself , youll find out on yer own
but man im juss tellin ya shit you shouldve known
and ill say this shit in a deeper tone , SHELL LEAVE YOU ON YER ASS ALL ALONE

tell me what yaz think id appreciate any feedback

IlluGin613 08-18-03 03:42 PM

how come i neva get any feedback? if it sucks juss tell me lol i can take it

BlUnT-MC 08-18-03 04:05 PM

deep shit, didn't read the whole thing 'cause it was too long an' I'm a slow reader.. but from the first half I really liked it.. you conveyed emotion real good, imagery was depicted nicely.. for such an' emotionallt distraught time you seem to still have a pretty clear head... 1

http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthr...&threadid=74026
^now peep this

IlluGin613 08-19-03 11:19 PM

uppn

IlluGin613 08-20-03 12:49 AM

uppn again

Jes 08-20-03 01:26 AM

despite the title....
(<--- FEMALE)

this was a decent drop, mainly because it was emotions speaking. Personally, the vocab was at times redundant, but it didn't have to be structurally correct since it was venting pent up feelings. I find it witty and clever the way you phrased some of the things you said. keep at it.

Am At Cha 08-20-03 01:44 AM

since the same shit happend to me:

I liked it alot, after reading it i was able to see what happend, how you felt (good expression), who is troy and what she did. After reading your i can definetly say i didnt have it as bad as i thought, but you put my thoughts on 'paper'. So good job, and just hope it doesnt happen again,


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