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Why!!!
I just sit back and think about the world//
Wonder when the first body felled// Was it before the Christ or after his death// Was he chopped up and served by a chef// So many wars so many dead and we still haven’t learned// People always thought of killing as their minds churned// Whether its racial or personal people still get a beating// You’ll never survive this world unless you’re the one that comes out the meeting// After two world wars we still haven’t learned our lesson// Countries still out there messing// Whether its external or internal people still getting killed// To many holes being made and then filled// Guns now being sold in shooting monthly// You can get hold of them in every single country// It can take one shooting and you’re the new dictator// Just like Bush and Blair, the mick taker// Come into the lime light and now causing a big shaker// Bush is trying to be the next big creator// But I’ve never seen anything faker// Sort out your own country before taking over others// See 13 year olds are still becoming new mothers// Being made pregnant by their big brothers// Just because the family never had a real lover// See why the fuck do will still bother// Why are people still dieing// Why are people still left crying// Why arent people learning from their mistakes// Why arent we making the changes, thats all it takes// Why// x2 Too many questions without answers// Too many little girls become table top dancers// Going on the game to make a living// People always taking but never giving// People still living on the street at night// Waking up knowing that they have another day to fight// Why are we living like this, through all this shite// Youngsters going out for under age drinking// Why are we letting them, what are we thinking// Having sex at a younger age// Teenage births have just gone straight off the gage// At the age of 12 going on the pill// Then going out for a quick cheap thrill// Letting some old man cut through them like a drill// Two years later they finally get impregnated// All just because they were never really educated// Having to sell drugs or their body to pay for the baby// This sorta life is just completely crazy// People dont believe it happens cause there to dammed daizy// Why are people still dieing// Why are people still left crying// Why arent people learning from their mistakes// Why arent we making the changes, thats all it takes// Why// x2 A kids mum and dad leave them on the streets// Left there for more than a couple of weeks// Making a living by tapping out some simple beats// Gets a few coppers for playing a banjo// This ent no life for a kid ya know// All they own is a bag of raggy clothes if there lucky// Mothers say to their children "stay away, they too mucky"// Living on the streets for years on end is no life// Knowing that at any time they could be robbed by a man with a knife// Probley just counting down to the end// Just waiting for death must drive them round the bend// Once the cough starts theres no return// Knowing their next to take their turn// No one would notice them gone so why should we worry// No need to save them, whats the hurry// Its there own fault, they chose to take that route// So lets blank them out, leave them on mute// Thats all the government say// Imagine everyone gave up a month pay// We might be able to save world hunger// So why are we making this shit last longer// Why are people still dieing// Why are people still left crying// Why arent people learning from their mistakes// Why arent we making the changes, thats all it takes// Why// x3 |
need feedback please people.........
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long one,descent shit i'll say that,some shit came off alil uncomplicated with wordplay and vocab,but it flowed and had a good topic and was descent throughout.so descent drop dawg.
Hit one of mine up please dawg. Peace |
yo, the first verse was weak, bad flow, hook's a'ight.. second verse's better still could use improvement...
that's all I'm gonna say 'cause you copped out on the reply to me.. I told you, you get back what u give... 1 |
people tell me what you think of my rap instead of ignoring it......!!
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the flow was off da yelzabob it wasn't about sex money drugs or violence it was about life and day to day shit that's going on worldwide keep that shit coming thun ~1~
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could i get some more feedback please people. my mates think i should try and get this recorded in england. what do you think of it? do you think it is worth trying to get a recording??
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i think its worth improving then recorded, and the best place to do it is -here- lol. like west said, decent piece but you need some improvement.
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thanks for the positive feedback people, i will improve it a bit and then try and get it recorded.
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Not worth the record..... You need to up your vocab. Your flow was way off. I didnt feel this peice at all, it was decent, but you need improvment. If you are looking for help, check out the wackness emergency center. They have great advice there. Check it out.... Overall-6/10 CHeck out mine |
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