b00ty call
 

Remember those times "chillin" in your car, real late at nite
Remember those good times and bad times, and the fights

Remember all those drinks we consumed
Remember all of the smiles
Remember my favorite position ...
Remember my perfect style

Remember my bangin body
Remember my silky bra
Remember my smooth skin
Remember all that you saw

Remember those phone calls, every 15 minutes
Remember all that shit we left prints in

Remember how we used to care for eachother, no matter what had happened before
Remember we said we'd always be there for eachother, like we really had something more

I remember when the phone calls stopped coming, and you never answered your phone
I remember every weekend I spent wishing I was with you, when I was all alone

I remember you not being yourself, like something weird had changed
I remember how sad I was, I remember the memories and I remember the PAIN ...

I remember your face, and I remember your words
But I still don't think I got treated the way that I deserve

I remember you tellin me you didn't care about me at all
I remember the times I was there for you, when I came even before you called

I thought I was your girlfriend, but you changed...
I guess my life has now been re-arranged


Although ...

I do Remember How when I tripped, you were there to catch me before my fall
But It was too late for me to realize that all I was to you was a b00ty call







Kinda weird poem ... I wanted to make this a love poem mixed with reality of how "friends with benefits" usually turns out in the end

Hey ya'll if you could leave a post of what you think of this poem, i'd really appreciate it!!! lol this was just a spur of tha moment kinda poem

hmmm not bad good delivery and flow id say that would be 8/10
vocab was kinda sketchy wat i mean by that would be like the low vocab more of theeasy words u were usinso around a 6/10
now emotional wise u did very good it was very emotional and u could tell u like ment it by personal expericicnce or not but id give that an 9/10

BLAH!!!...i like dat ish mami........lol....it wuz kind of wierd....but i wuz feel'n u....i mean it....1ne

GYRL!!!
I loved this. I really really loved it. DAMN it makes me mad just to read it..Its so true.

>Remember how we used to care for eachother, no matter what had happened before
Remember we said we'd always be there for eachother, like we really had something more

^great line.

>I remember your face, and I remember your words
But I still don't think I got treated the way that I deserve

OMG. I feel you on that one gyrl.

>I do Remember How when I tripped, you were there to catch me before my fall
But It was too late for me to realize that all I was to you was a b00ty call

^Perfect way to end it..Really powerful last line..I been there before, I know what it feels like, But I went through it all over again reading this poem. Nicely Written, no doubt.
I liked it a lot.
Stay up with this gyrl and keep em comin.
Peace!

nice... you got a lotta talent it really put an image in my mind of how you felt about all dat shit i dont think it was really too weird more deep and heart felt then anything keep up the good work 9/10 1BoUnC3

thx guys , keep postin how ya think i did!!! peace

I liked the peice for the realness of it. Been there with that "Friends with benefits" mess. It does always turn out that way. And we do always miss them, because the part most women want was never ever touched by us. You brought the realness with this peice gurl, the vocab coulda been stepped up but I think, even though I think it was unintentional, it let the feelings in this peice shine through. Even though the imagry and the vocab lacked in this peice I think you've struck a nerve with the realness and all the truth you put in it. I agree with DaGyrl... that was a really good way to end it. Lookin forward to more, peace

thx ya'll....keep postin up what ya thought of this shit HONESTLY....i just got in a fight wit dis dude i liked a LOT and i wrote this as a therapy kinda than gya know ... PEACE 1

structure was interestin....kinda like how you kept usin repitition....really worked nicely
vocab was simple but i don think it really effected the out come.....emotion on target and all in all a good drop...ima say 8/10

keep droppin

hey girl this was something i felt, i loved the ending just like most ppl seemed to, thought you could have brought vocab up some thou, but the emotion made up for it here. me im not a fave of the whole repeating thing, but this piece was good with it, it seems to go with it. anywho not much else to say i guess other ppl got it all, just keep postin with your talent


~Tera~
DONT HATE

well...this actually waddnt all that bad...i saw the title n didnt even give it a second glace..till tha screen just popped up...heh...but i can feel you ma....and my apologies...for i am onna THEM niggas...the BOOTY' CALLER.....an this jes made me look at how ya girls really are...

ma ...keep ya head up...like ya piece ya flow n structure mos def was on point

igido

The use of remember was at times spoilt by a constant barrage of the 'same thing'.

But that didn't really matter. Because there was plenty of emotion. Emotion that seemed pure and painful. Gritty with some real sharp points.

I feel what you're saying. 'Men' in general can be like that. Use women to meet their sexual appetite. Using the weaknesses and to such a ravaging effect (that they don't even realise how 'ravaging' it is). Though it can be flipped to the female on male. but mostly male to female. But anyway, just thought i'd say i understand as much as a man can understand a woman's pain in such a situation.

Er, emotional piece.

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