let me know what ya think.....im spittin peep game!
 

Cold sweats at night…a twitch in his slumber/
It owns him now...hes hit more pipes than pissed plumbers/
Feenin for more…in his sleep he’s dreaming of scores/
Tha monster that controls him…just seeps in his pores/
He chooses tha pipe..that keeps abusin his life/
A fix is his only goal,….even after losin his wife/
She knew he was lying as soon as she looked in his high beams/
Crying….his head hung in shame to tha world and quit trying/
His mind became weightless as he tried to make a statement/
Face squints….leaning on tha wall in his basement/
His life slips away….been feelin out of place lately/
Drops his dope on tha floor…and hits tha ground base crazy/
He lets out a moan…knowing thats all that he owns/
He scoops up his stash in a trance…controlled like a drone/
Waiting for death…he takes a hit with a steady head/
And as tha rocks feel his lungs… he sees hes already dead/

sick drop, you have nice creative punches:


that sta, was sick


this one slips of da tounge nicely, and wud sound great in audio

keep dropping, return the favour by replying in my post

i agree with Ayura that those parts were good. alot of it rolled off the tounge very well. sorry this is so short, i just dont have much to say. it was damn near perfect... the ONLY thing i didnt like about it was that i didnt write it

GREAT JOB

i wrote dis shit watchn t.v. all day.......


We got Blacks gettin killed by cops....for the verdict, we await-Patient//
punishment is suspension wit pay, more like a vacation//
we defend ourselves and get life....might as well Revoke Rights//
preachin "Non Violence", when the government Promote Fights//
mad when cops get beat, but'll pay to see Blacks Fighting on Pay Per View//
Where's the justice? they hold us back, when we've paid our dues//
The Man Restrict us from anything green...Land, Money Or Herb//
Thats the least we should get, but they think its funny...the nerve//
of them to them to laugh in our face, thinkin this shit is funny//
Kids-is-Hungry, while the U.S. is trickin-money to Diffrent-Countrys//
and Give us Rights? naw, ya'll would rather Give us hell //
yall Promised us 40 acres, but converted it into prison cells?//
im just expressin my belief in "White Supremecy"//
our Rights are limited, my own people actin like my enemy//
is it so bad for us to team up, and Voice Our Plans//
Whites cant unite for a common cause, but the Boys Scouts Can?//
whats the Difference between us and them announcin tha evil//
if it wasnt for our beatings, niggas would never've been responsible people//
live in a distorted Democracy, and the Flag is a joke//
the PRESIDENT shipped the white in, and tried to kill us wit Dope//
and they never wanted us to learn to read, or be Clever, in fact//
its hasnt changed, ironic our Flag's the color of the Confederate Flag//
It should be a sin, to be treated this way, yet we pretend//
but cant say i agree wit the ways, of the Country We Defend//
Is our world coming to an end?

I gotta say you do have some sick shit man. Your shit does flow right off the tounge. Some of the shit i read on here Only flows for the people that write it but I caught a beat right away in your shit. Keep that shit up man.

good lookin..................uppin!!

woah, dat was sum deep shit, i aint black myself, neither im i white but im asian and i know how racism hurts - badly -, so im kinda feeling the level you where on bredrin. dis line was madd in my opinion, just because i can relate to it:


nice multi here, and it smoothly changed its subject matter from the goverment organising fights, to the law watching blacks fights on pay per day



i mean dat whole verse dont just relate to black people, it can relate to any person who's facing discrimination, gays, sexism, fat people, asians, marshains lol. tight drop and keep dropping shit like dat bruv.