4ThaWuInYou Verse...
 

Any Criticism would be helpful ya'll...this is gonna go on a track for a compilation CD..so any feed back would be nice.

Some helpful info:
The company is called New Soulja Mobb Records. ( I know it's a gay name or whatever, but hey.)


This is New Soulja Mobb, signing on the dot/
Filling grave plots, after aligning gun shots/
Straight to your dome like a trip to Universal/
Ever heard a diss verse with less than 5 curse words?/
I've hurt worse, and after this you'll understand/
S-M-R is taking "over" and you going "under" man/
May be one to underhand, but when this thunder spans/
You'll catch the lightning quick that'll leave you wonderin'/
Constant bludgeoning like adolescent criminals/
The feelings terminal, cripplin' your spiritual/
And when I flip the scroll, my enemies will know/
And all will feel the wrath of the New Soul/

Aight, well this is aight but 6 bars for a verse is a little short...Some multies but some of them didn't rhyme well...OK similies...uh...I would give this 6.7/10...Keep elevating...

Aight..thanks for the feedback.

KEEP BUILDING I HAVE SEEN MUCH WOARSE AND THIS WAS AN ILL START BUT I WANT TO SEE A FULL PEACE FROM YOU

That's was flame, kid. Good Work. Stay wit it