Signs
 

ENTER
STOP
NO SMOKING
NO ALCHOLIC BEVERAGES
NO FIREARMS
BABY ON BOARD
GO
BRIDGE AHEAD; YIELD
TAKE A NUMBER
MUST BE 21 OR OLDER
NEXT STOP 210 MILES
WRONG WAY
DON'T WALK........WALK
SLOW DOWN
FOR SALE
NO PASSING
CONSTRUCTION AHEAD
CONSTRUCTION ENDED
DANGER AHEAD
BEWARE
DEAD END
USE EXTREME CAUTION
PLEASE USE OTHER DOOR
CHILDREN CROSSING
DO NOT TOUCH
FLAMMABLE
FOR EMERGENCY USE ONLY
WELCOME
SIGN IN HERE
NO ELECTRONIC DEVICES
THANK YOU
EXIT

if you get it good if not it's my fault. don'tmind me i'm trying new things. more to come.

Intelligent concept, and a nice ass piece.

I thought it flowed well, and I like the way you put the signs in a manner that follows suite and goes along with a theme.

Don't walk... walk- simple, but it really fit this piece, gave it an artistic pause.

Keep posting, I enjoy these topics... definately beats the A B/1 2 rhymes...

I mean absolutely no offense to you... but I hate art.

I really do. I really really hate art.

Please forgive me for saying so.

thank you Necro at least you consider it "art" thats all I can ask. believe it or not i never expect anyone to understand what i mean so all i can ask is you acknowledge me. in that regard i thank you.

I appreciate this for what it is...
I have never seen that done before..and at first
it was fascinating to me..
but I really wasn't feeling it that much..
I like my poetry to contain emotion and depth
and although u structured this to paint a picture
almost...I still didn't see much else more than creativity

But still...I give u full props for trying new styles...
That doesn't happen enough with poets

lack of emotion is in fact emotion; depth is only a matter of perception; and style is merely a benchmark for time periods......

with that said thank you for the response as i said if you don't understand it, i take it as my failing as an artist, i will not subject you to an explanation thank you for appreciating it.............1

upping please more feedback............

construction ahead
construction ended....a phase of life beginning and ending...

danger ahead
beware
end...someone pushing the envelope..a life too short..ended

use extreme caution
please use ther door...I told you once I told you twice

I could go through all of this but im tired and maybe
I analyze too much..at least Calisto thinks I have
an overactive brain...maybe im crazy....

this was definately different but good in its own way..

'abstract art 4 sale'

peace

^^^
straightened som things out in my mind

Prophiit ~ i have no idea how the concept came to you but i like the insight you have in making this peice have a whole new construction that I have personally never seen before
I applaud your journey to new views of poetry

Elevation is the key to motivation
pZ DF

Thank you for the feedback Dead and Famous..................it never hurts to try something new...........Content as always you understood the point and meaning behind the words thank you............................................... ...........1

^^^Content u have really smart eyes and u probly think of sum explanations that the writer didnt think of.

Prophiit~nice drop and its not played out . keep doin ur thing cuz it makes me think deeper than i usually do ur to me ur pieces always need an explanation so i think and i think and then wen i finally found one i wanna find a deeper explanation. overall good drop.Keep uppin ~1luv~

Shiznit's Thoughts:

Artistically Challenged.

You started it with ENTER and ending it with EXIT sorta reflected an open door being closed. Brilliant.

its in a way of preventing something from happening. Your chosen signs are very well thought out that they brought a greater meaning that surpassed the words one way or another.

Why not choose, NO UTURN, RailRoad Crossing, or even Foreign Objects Beware?..Dont ask me, those are just random signs i see everyday.

I think the ALL CAPS represented how life has certain limitations and we cant do whatever we want. WE follow certain rules. WE shouldnt ignore signs that would lead into our doom...hehe.

So hows that for me "getting it"?

Nice one.

Rhetorical Insights Week VII is up. DROP ONE. Thanks.

ENTER followed by 'Restrictions'
Proceed into 'Cautions'
TAKE A NUMBER followed by more 'Restrictions'
210 miles 'INFORMATION" followed by a 'Warning'
Don't Walk....Walk 'instuctions that 'contridict'

I can see a patteren here or a glimpse of underlying meaning. I can even see an association with current social and government issue's. Rule's Rule's Rule's.. Guidence? Not without contradiction!

SIGN IN HERE...'Monitoring'
NO ELECTRONIC DEVICES...'more restrictons' before your EXIT or departure..

I can feel this in a couple of ways... Such conformity in our lives is something most peole never give thought to. I just wonder how much more our society is going to put up with.

Kind of like...
Living in a land of law's in contrast to..
Living by the Law of the land....

I know I am kind of abstrac myself, hence the appreciation of your drop. I thank you for making us think.. Nice style and concept, keep's ya on ya toe's..

Great way to express something..

I am flattered by all the positive responses..........thanks to doggydog and shiznit your views were both somewhat on point...so close...........really they are totally correct just a little adjustment is needed.

First of all the concept came to me in the stupidest way possible. My wife wrecked our truck and so i had to take the bus to work and walk home, well when you walk and slow down a bit you tend to notice things: traffic, signs, people and how the act.
The poem is a reflection of rules, and how they effect the journey through life we all take. ENTER-birth - CONSTRUCTION AHEAD/ENDED-puberty -- EXIT-death. each sign is an example of the new and different things we experience through life. I thought long and hard about posting this and decided to do it only because every time i post in open mic i'm told i don't use meta's so i figured i'd just write one big metaphor for life........course they probably say "it dosen't have enough multi's" LOL just kidding................thanks again..................1

yea....this is diff brah...i wouldnt know how to critique ya....i applaud you on origionality....u the second cat that has brought somethin diff....i think this shit is deep...cant explain why...but it mos def applies to signs n ways of life...nah mean


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