Jus' a day
 

im not tryin on this one...not even testin my wordplay or vocab...jus in tha mood for some writtin....peace



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Id like to speak my mind,But if only my mind could even talk//
Id stop allot of corruptive lying,But im being eye'd like a spying hawk//
Is-this-what society-is,becuz-this-injustice-is degrading my self//
I cant even dream of succesfull buisnes,Im being held back from enriching my wealth//
My life is a constant ballin' party,Apart from the days when my punk ass is broke//
I stay at home lookin at girls all "tarty",Knowing that life is a constant joke//
Wonderin if rope would burn my throat,or if it would help and stop this pain//
but i dont,i put on my coat because its cold and its pourin with rain//
i wonder the streets and ponder intensly,askin if life is as hard as stone//
i see my bruddas freestylin imensly,they shout me over,but i jus wana be alone//
im thinkin is home were the heart is,cuz if it is then i really cant find it//
my lifes bobslayin down the ice track and deppresion is close,i cant stand it//
turn to drink,turn to crime turn to god,but even the father cant come close to heal//
so then again turn to crime in a nod,i see a car that i like then i steal//
but dont get me rong this ol'parody aint life,its about days that feel hard to live//
therefore tomorow i might think its nice,to write rhymes about girls,to give,,//

to give to who? lol, it was an alright peice, you need to increase ya vocab and ya multis, keep dropping bruv

^Exactly...

yea Ayura put it in words, but tha way u flow is similar to mine, tha laid back jus chillin shit so i liked it but it does need some work even if it is jus some simple shit

GOD DAMN......i drop some bull shit i dont even tickle my brain about and u knock a brudda down....LOL im kiddin

anyway thanx...

any more oppinions.....holla ppl...tell me what ya think..!!!

peace..!!1