1st Post
 

This is my first post, interested in feedback

I ain't gonna lie this is my 1st time
still i'm ready to drop a rhyme like murder ain't a crime
So take the time and pay careful attention to each line
I'm not here stretchin' and my rhymes ain't benign
Though I'm new to this site
I'm a show you my words are outta sight
I rhyme with diction, and this ain't fiction i'm dipictin'
So don't be so quick to be dismissin', the words that I'm spittin'
I know you feel this shit despite it bein' written

I ain't here to pull punches or drive you insane
But still I hope to lift you up like you was on a crane
I write with intensity
Cursing like I got copralilic propensity
Suspensefully, droppin' lines relentlessly
Hold up, i'm not sure you understand fully

You see I do this when I'm feelin' in a jam
Counting cards like i'm d-definately d-definately rainman
Well i'ma finish this now and leave stealth like a ghost
And wait patiently for the wealth of feedback you gonna post

Honestly, Some parts of this shit were pretty good...You seem to know about internals:

"still i'm ready to drop a rhyme like murder ain't a crime"

And These 2 bars:
"I rhyme with diction, and this ain't fiction i'm dipictin'
So don't be so quick to be dismissin', the words that I'm spittin'
I know you feel this shit despite it bein' written" - Were Dope!

It Kind of fell off towards the end, but what i pointed out shows a shit load of potential, ev

Honestly, Some parts of this shit were pretty good...You seem to know about internals:

"still i'm ready to drop a rhyme like murder ain't a crime"

And These 2 bars:
"I rhyme with diction, and this ain't fiction i'm dipictin'
So don't be so quick to be dismissin', the words that I'm spittin'
I know you feel this shit despite it bein' written" - Were Dope!

It Kind of fell off towards the end, but what i pointed out shows a shit load of potential, even if it takes painstaking months to really show it, it will be worth it in the end!

Keep Droppin' Them!