I aM a WoMaN
 

"I Am A Woman"

i am not your slave, your maid or your hoe,
i am a woman from my head to my toe.
i am beautiful inside and out
i am a woman and that is no doubt.
my hair is real and my nails are not fake
my beauty is not bought with the money i make,
i am a woman no matter my color,
although we all vary one from a nother.

i was made from the mother’s blood, just a drop
she gave me pure beauty that will never stop.
i am beautiful inside and out
i am a woman and that is no doubt.

my life is lived and every day i grow,
i am a woman just to let you know.
do not look down on me
for i am worthy of utmost praise,
i am a woman until the end of my days.

respect me like you would your mother,
love me like you would any other color.
love me no matter what i do,
call me a “woman”, that is what i am to you.

i am a woman, i can not deny
i am real and i will not lie,
i have been through war and pain
no matter what, i am a woman all the same

don’t get smart with me
have a heart to heart with me
be honest and open, relieve yourself
i am a woman and nothing else.

~Eternal~

uppin 4 feedbak

~UpPiN..............~

iight

i liked the idea, but not so much the piece, i thought some times the lines were put there with no other purpose than the ryme with the line above it. also i think you could pass onto more the aabb in this piece, but maybe thats just me

not much else to say, other then liked the idea, but you could up the piece


~Tera~
DONT HATE

^thanx 4 tha honesty really appriciate it ~1~

ehh i agree with DONT HATE good idea but the piece was not particularly appealing especially since im a guy, the structure was too simple, slip in hidden meaninggs, longer lines and just let it flow, 1luv.

dont double post dont double post dont double post
dont double post dont double post dont double post

shiznits gonna close one of these eventually you know that....

~your speaking from your heart on an alicia keys tip~
~but your slippin in unneeded lines just to appease kids~
~and grown ups you dont suck but the tops played~
~if schools out and summertime hits you step it up a grade~

elevate....nothing more nothing less...say things in different
ways to make you think..make others think....peace

iiight I thought this piece was OK. Great meaning, good style, flow needs a lil work ... as well does vocab. But otherwise this poem was tite as hell!!! And I'm a chick so I kinda undastand that stuff betta than tha dudes readin it. OVerall i say 7/10




love me no matter what i do,
call me a “woman”, that is what i am to you.

i am a woman, i can not deny
i am real and i will not lie,

^^^^ Great Lines!!! ^^^^

Yeah, as Eastside said, some of the lines were excellent, A woman myself also, I took pride in them.
I dont know if you know the song I Am Woman by Helen Reddy ( if you dont then be sure to check it out ), but I got a feel from this piece like I do that song.

All in all, a decent piece.. Kudos~