the troubled life
 

yo, life is hard and you have to stay strong/
you gotta cause life aint long as you think/
can be gone in a blink like a second/
do the best to make it great no matter how wrecked it is/
why does life have to be like this/
its as if a bunch a dicks (comin/cumin) to your face from every place you go/
fast or slow shit catches and stays in your way/
cant get out of it like the skies start to turn grey/
so much emotions that causes trauma and stress and messes with your mind/
you gotta fight that shit to what you are destined/
all the shit that happens to you teaches a lesson/
you wouldnt be strong or learn if it werent for shit/
and dont quit and stay literate to what you commit/
people gettin murdered and smashed/
life starts to lash and make it more troubled and tougher/
but people love to criticize like an annoying critter/
it starts to crawl down your back and bites/
so you have to go online and type what you have to write/
light yo life up like a dynomite and lights like a fire/
and i dont mean to destroy or a suicidal action/
i mean to make your life more so you have satisfaction/
all the shit you have make it a subtraction/
make yo good stuff an addition and make sure your shit is able for people to listen/


someone critique this rhyme please.