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2hot2handle 09-01-03 02:21 AM

sexy girls
 
seeexy, oh seexy, girls i like when they drop it to the floor/
strippin and slippin in the room, oh girl gimme some more/
bendin over dancin everywhere movin every fuckin body part/
showin their body art i say ready set start/
girl bouncin like she a bitch/
im dancin with one and switchin to 2/
switchin and askin who they are/
they girls with big boobies and booties bouncin like stars shootin up the motherfuckin roof on fire/
girls ass on fire sort of like mariah but ranked higher/
against the wall sexin the room up to the ceiling/
gettin hot like girls nice ass body is what im seeing/
she a human being with boobie size d/
bootie size c big as hell like she in a magazine/
something ive never seen but not obscene/
nice and clean hips and thighs/
her body is a really good size somethin i wanna utilize/
she a 10 outta 10, her booty bigger than big ben/
she compared like a beyonce and jlo but not with many men/
girl all naked and full baked/
all horny like her ass been shaked/

tido193 09-01-03 02:41 AM

its alright your words are to simple and the structures off but its alright

Skam22 09-01-03 11:18 AM

Work with it, take out a few words here, add a few there. You know, maybe to a beat.
you have to get that to flow a bit smoother.
Feeling the theme though still.
You got some real comical shit coming through there
Keep it up homes, just keep writing shit, don't listen to the disses
Nice and fresh

If you do a rewrite post it here, I'd like to read it
Laters

pot1ent 09-01-03 11:41 AM

Needs structure!!

even the line lengths out...try that n you'll be alot beter open mic(er)


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