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im the best when i turn and twist the shit that has been abused/
its all abused and used so i give the shit a good beat/
i keep it with flow and street and hood/
its not boring like wood or any of that useless garbage/
so i pledge to keep this shit on the edge so it wont crumble/
my rhymes make the ground rumble that make people stumble/
then they realize what the fuck was that/
it was that cat that dont chatter and i dont give a fuck whats the matter/ cause ...6 second beat
this shit aint funny like adam sandler or some happy gilmore/
my shit i spit is hardcore and knocks you down from rich to poor/
fuck all you basic easy people who think they nice and clean/
thinkin they so hot cause they in a magazine/
well you know nothin of rap and poetry/
your just another incompletely useless freak/
who cant do beter than their peak but think they can cause they got dinero/
and a big stereo playin audio in the back of their bentley and their denali/
fuck all the people who think their tight but really not/
they actin like some big shot who got alot/

this was weak..

rhyme scheme was bad
flow was worse
concept was...non existant...saying shit about how good you are dosent count as a concept

thank you A2Z, i don't gotta say it...jus keep workin on it...