'Down Under'...SS Verse
 

A Place Of Myth And Legend...A Place None Knew To Exist
A Mystic Glow Set By The Triple 6 Laced With The Burning Crucifix
A Man Dies In A Knife Fight...Lived By His Money And Sweet Talking Lip
A Man Shrouded In Motral Sin...He Begins His Brimstone Trip
Its Over With, Not A Chance To Repent, No Dice For An Exorcist
A Dim Light Burns Away A Man's Life...The Very Soul Is Penetrated
A New Level Of Pain Is Generated...As An Evil Man Is Incinerated
Paying For What Hes Done, For How Many People Hes Lost Respect
For How Hes Was Too Cheap For Chairty, Now He Pays For It In His Flesh
Suddenly Hes Remembers Who He Loved, The Way He Used To Live
About All The Girls hes Had Sex With...All The Fatherless Kids
All The Child Support He Refused To Give...All The Girls He'd Hit

*Flash*

He Was In The Trailer, With His Girl...A Too Young Blonde Raising A Kid
She Was Angry At The World...One Way Or Other, He Didnt Give A Shit
But This Was It...She Had Spent Too Much Money, Too Little Left Of It
She Desperately Tried To Explain... He Wouldnt Listen, She Began To Plead
'Buying Shit She Dosent Need...Does She Thinks It Grows On Trees?'
'Shes Lieing, The Fucking Slut'...He Began To Twitch In Anger Restrained
He Grabbed A Bat, Raised It Up...

*Flash*
...He Was Back In His World Of Pain

A Tornado Of Screams...A Wall Of Fire In Capabale Of Breach
The Mourning Souls Strung Out On The Walls, Vieled In Fiery Wreaths
Skin Is Slowly Scalded Away...No Possibility Of Relief Or Escape
And There The Man Collapsed...Left To View The Smoking Landscape
And Left There For All Eternity...His Last Day Was His Judgement Day

Good imagery and flow here...

Good vocab and conveyed the topic well...

Not a huge fan of the subject matter but still a good read...

Keep it up...

Also peep mine...

What?...

yo, that was some tight shit, it had good flow and tha flash was off tha hook too, jus one problem is tha subject u did is too overused, i think half tha threads in open mic by tha better MC's have to death and tha thought of it, but as a flow i'd give it a 7/10...

^^it wasnt my choice...i was given a topic in the sacred scriptures

oh i c, then just take it as i said, a good drop...