life
 

your life can be gone in one breathe/
your one breathe away from a death so live it to the fullest/
you have plenty of time to be dead so dont leave it messed/
your life is like a test seeing what you can overcome/
are you gonna get a good job or be a bum/
cause bums smoke and get drugged up with cocaine/
blows your head and leaves you all messed up like you have no brain/
Bums just have no cash and they end up sleepin on the streets in trash/
you cant think and you start to shiver/
if you keep doin that your life will be quicker/
itll be gone in a flash like a flash light/
you better start workin cause yo rhymes aint tight/
so you think youll throw away everything that you had/
actin all sad so why dont you bitch make it fuckin better/
make it good and be a trend setter for younger people that look up to you/
dont make your life all screwed cause youll lose/
cause it will just give you more bad news/
so keep your head up and dont look down/
dont make shit or you wont be around/

aight, that shit was EXTREMELY basic, u need to put some word-play in it, aight u did have some but :

itll be gone in a flash like a flash light/

is WAY to simple, change tha flash light wit a camera or sumtin, jus keep workin and keep takin advice and puttin it in ur flow u'll get somewhere...

i agree with that, being that i know what its like to have to flow simple i can say that it was a good drop. the vocab and wordplay were there but they were basic. just keep reading, freestyling or what ever you do...

5/10