Eternal in your arms
 

So easy to read what youre thinking
Simple to see that you need me
Could it be the way you broke
The way you twisted round
Cause it wasnt the way you spoke--
But the way you sound
The sparkle in your eyes
Mild hypnotising
Giggling filtering the air..
Live a life in my dreams with a single stare
(No women in my life will ever compare)


Give me your hand
Let me take you away
Ive got all night
And youve got all day

Let me show you
What it feels like
To give yourself away
Let me show you
What it feels like
To live forever in a day



Ive got a hand or two
That im wandering
Youve had to know
All this time
What Ive been fondeling

Dont wanna sound insane
but the way you speak my name
Sweet sentimate kisses the air
(No women in my life dare ever compare)



Now, we are breathing
Light with the sunset
Your words are an offset
Keep embracing your legs

Sprinkled night cap
Now its on your bra strap
Dont understand the words youre saying

I promised I would love you
Hovering all above you
Stars floating accross the sky
Eyes drifting into mine

Forget I will never
Replace to disface
Forgeting but not regreting
Impossible to stay
I hold you for a moment
But each second slips away
If I keep you in my mind forever
Our love will always remain
(Eternal in your arms)

awwwww

"Cause it wasnt the way you spoke--
But the way you sound"

^that is the first line that really stood out to me...
Cause it's so true....iunno, well it is with me anyways...

This was sad...but still I enjoyed it...it was so surreal and
just seemed to float as you were reading it....you had alot
of nice lines that I could quote, but I won't,.....I'll just let u
know that I really enjoyed it..
keep em coming

Thanks for your reply Soultress!

nice piece...
felt the emotions.
it kinda lacked on vocab
maybe you could have described the way she looked, or just the way you were feeling that day, or how the world looked like that day. Cuz it stayed kinda superficial on one hand... you could have gone way deeper with this. No hate intended.
Nice piece though, keep droppin, i'd give it a 7/10

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awwwwwwwwwwwwww.......... yah that poem was tite as hell!!! Great emotion, awesome tone, good use of words!!! Keep it up babe!!!

Thanks for the critique split, and your reply Eastside.