Feedback please
 

I'm here to get this show on the road
i'ma leave you confused, consciously ready to explode
i'm a newbie just coming up the ranks
Attacking your hind quarters and bitin' at ya flanks

for years and years I was lost, pissed off
like a light that'd been switched off
Soft, but now i'm ready to win at all cost
Ready to spit venom if I get tested or crossed

Don't bother tryin' me your outta this class
I school you, fuel you, set fire to you like blast, blast, blast!
at last, I forgot to mention, this shit is beyond comprehension
listen clearly man have i got your attention?

Dispensin' these rhymes is like a lyrical crime
i'm guilty in the 1st degree ready to do time
but that's just my pedigree prepare for demise
Here comes the horror scene you better cover your eyes

For the most part I liked it but there were a few lines I would've changed like (Don't bother tryin' me your outta this class
I school you, fuel you, set fire to you like blast, blast, blast!)
and I lost ur flow wit (at last, I forgot to mention, this shit is beyond comprehension
listen clearly man have i got your attention?)

Other than that it was cool and good for a newbie...........
Keep elevatin as I am..........................

PEACE~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~>

thanks pre-tense for feedback