Dr. Feelgood has got the best of me............
 

Desperate and alone
Responces have grown short of my own
......................(drifting into unconscious)

Feel like my body is loosing
Every breath I take is becoming short
Entrapped in a world of illusion
Levetating......................................... .....
Glowing white light up ahead
Old friends I havent seen in a while
Over and over again I keep hearing a voice saying he's
Dead

ha ha, i liked it cause it has a solemn and hidden feelin in it, although it WAS pretty simple...tha way u put tha dead at tha end is like tha climax BUT it's AT THA END, which can always leave tha reader thinkin...good piece...

simple but crude..........it lacked length but it didn't in depth..........what am i sayin......nice drop............................................

Thanks alot. I know it was simple but I was trying to explain in as minimal of words as I could to explain an overdose................

Thanx again...............

PEACE~~~~~~~~~~~~>

yeh
it was alright, coulda made lines little longer or something
but other then that, this piece was tice.

Keep droppin
peace

short and simple,it sometimes makes a good piece.keep droppin.~1~