Just a Little Hello Verse to RB..!!
 

addicts require product like its oxygen that we breathe//
the more they take,its closer to the last breath theylle ever breathe//
and as they leave for heaven,its the product they remember//
how it powered them,and to they crack they always surrenderd//
biological life i look with splender,how always hearts will always love//
and how two soulmates fit eachother like a hand into a glove//
but obscure days i had to observe//and think of ways to try and fix it//
and see how rejectionfrom myself,makes one jus crumble like a biscuit//
im in the thiknes of ghetto,its like a dream to own a house//
i wonder how ill get the money to ever marry and have a spouse//
lives lived like mice,or should i say more like a rat//
how all the hobbos on the streets cant even afford to rent a flat//
its descrimination,intimidating me to violence//
how just one person could steal my dignity,with a tool just like a hydrant//
call me a tyrant,but at least im a rebel with a cause//
wen future MC's lookin back,we know its "C" that theyll applause..!!

yo....uppin this shit....any1 got a oppinion..................!?!?!?

yo flowed well throughout,had afew good bars,but don't really like tha repeatin shit on tha first bar i would have went with "receive" on tha second,anyway vocab was descent,message was good as it seemed from tha heart,thus it was descent shit.

Peace,yo i saw u sayin u liked topical typa drops,read these dawg,see wot u think -

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=77485

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=77120

thanx man....ive posted my shit on 1...ill read the other SOON.....ur 1st one was long enough...!!! lol...


Anyway...uppin..!!

That was pretty damn good, man...
Nice message.
And I like the way ya didn't dive in and talk about how thug you are.
Ya just rap about what you see which I can appreciate a helluva lot more than false hoodlum messages.
Like West said, for your opener...
Find another rhyming word.
But the bulk of it had good flow, deep meaning, and a kinda catchy albeit off course kinda closer.
I say off course cuz ya went from a deep message to a self-prop all of a sudden...
But it stayed on target for the most part.

Keep at it, man.
Good shit.

Peace

thanx man........uppin againn..!!??? any more oppinions...!?!?

yo man...uppin...........?????


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