the elements
 

there is a chemistry in rap that has to be proceeded/
its something that this industry has to reach yet/
its the elements that contributes heart and passion for this feelin/
without elements it will be all trash and no structure/
its like rap would be a person on crutches and its something you cant get enough of/
its the love that creates the formula that goes through a cycle/
this game right now is in a pile with great style/
but needs elements to create the strong piece of the industry to express all the shit that they have felt/
keepin it all gangsta and street with the ghetto beat/
releasin it all from the beginning and goin currently/
but recently you gotta keep it goin and dont stop/
keepin this shit all hip hop that is so amazin/
im just blazin with these lyrical flows that keep poeple crazin/
its all wild and wouldnt be without the elements/
without it rap would have no offense or defense for innocence/
does that make sense? if you said no you havent been listenin/
now im just lay back with the elements just flowin while im chillin/

aight, u gotta either have a rhyme scheme or not... u kept switchin, in tha type of poem u did u can't do that, it won't sound right and it didn't sound right here niether, as a poem, it wasn't deep enough and i didn't feel like it was a poem, more of a quick off tha mind rap, (not a freestyle) jus keep droppin and elevate and u'll find ur own style...

^^^^^^i agree.~1~