Not the usual Thug shit..!!!
 

pockets of maddnes,kept in bundles of dozens//
a whole life of saddnes was the result of my cousinz//
two or three started to fall,fell a victim to the street//
i turned my head ignored crime,and fell a victim to the beat//
was my life pay back,from sins my elders comited//
made me feel like that suicide was sumthin i could of admited//
my anguish worsend,got more hellish every day//
another brudda got it,murda changed the way we pray//
we dont ask for change of life,I ask for a deathles week//
a peacfull Compton,Jamaica Queens,London,Wolftown i seek//
my people reek of sin,its like i smell it as i pass them//
my immature self wud done sumthin stupid,maby glass them//
scar a face,leave bloody mess as i stood braggin//
boastin how i got em as my homeboys stood laughin//
that shit aint happenin,now ive grown up to appreciate fairnes//
but still we do our silly maddnes cuz we sumtimes fell a lil careless//
im feelin like my god just tore this,got down like nas and ripped my hert//
squeezed so tight and took it,like its an Unnecessary body part//
well thats my feelin,even the children start by stealin//
they move to bigger things in life,like gangbangin and drug dealin//
this aint a thug song or gangster topic,its what i feel bout a few emotions//
like if i grew to be the best,i even sometimes feel like iv de-motioned//

nice multiez and concept...also good flow...and vocab was aiiight...could use a little elevation though...but overall this was a tight piece...Can you hit up any of my open mics that are on page 1????? I think I got like 5 so you can pick and choose...lolbut I just finished one a coupla minutes ago Called 2:56 am...

aight blud...i will....butthanx for the compliments tho...i just woke up that mornin,and i was gettin ready for college....i had about 20 mins left so i used nearly 9mins to write it...!!! me personaly,i dont need elevatin,but that verse could do with a re-vamp....

uppin..!?!?

to me, it was borin, i really wasn't feelin it, u had wordplay and a flow but i didn't feel like it caught my eye (or my ear)...hit ur head on a cloud, naomean?...