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A.T. 09-04-03 05:00 PM

Influenzed by music
 
I'm musically made and made to make music,
made to piss you off till you ball up your fist, and I'm the cause that makes you use it.
I'm the cause of everything stupid that you'd ever do in your life.
You and your boy Mike was aight till I told you to go screw with his wife, right?
So gimmie the mic so I can recite and cause catastrophies,
being almost like Saddam but white, is the only thing thats blastin me,
So until I quite committin blasphemy...
you wont see me slittin wrist in person, but actually what you hate to believe is the reality.
You cant escape your dreams, so what makes you think that you could escape from me?
My lyrics pack plenty of dangerous things, like razorblades...
so everyday I make you scream,
I posses you and make you think of renegade schemes until its midnight and I strike causing you to die because I made your entire brain just freeze.

gimmie some feed back on this one yo... it would help alot

A.T. 09-04-03 05:23 PM

uppin for feedback on this shit yall... how can I make myself better.... much preciated folks...
A.T.

Verbatim 09-04-03 05:32 PM

your right dawg, our styles are almost the same
we should do a collab maybe

but ya i liked this
had a nice flow, and vocab was also good
keep droppin yo

peace

A.T. 09-04-03 05:34 PM

yeah... maybe we should do a collab... that would be tight as fuck... but anyways thanx for the feedback... im off to work!!!

STILL UPPIN !!!!!

Provoked Images 09-04-03 08:22 PM

simply put, where's tha wordplay? it seemed like an Em rhyme to me and everything he writes, he makes u go "huh?" than "oh" than a couple secs later "DAMN!", if u can get that in a line, it would help tha flow a lot, oh, u tried to much to get a good endin line, it didn't hit me hard, it wasn't like u jus was sayin "NOW WAT BITCH!" jus come hard at tha end, esp since as befo, i felt this was sorta like an Em rhyme, jus keep risin to a new elevation...

A.T. 09-05-03 01:27 AM

still uppin


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