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...Mechoniod Gladiators...
*aight*
iv seen the battles of the future, and here is what it is genitics taking on the form of quadruple helix// differant collections of synthetic materials// skin tissue covering a cybergenitic realm// cells manipulate across a mechanical voicebox// amplifier's connected from da solar plexus to the fore-arm// needless to breathe spitting at lightspeeds// which might cause supercomputers processors to bleed// at a thousands reads, microchips producing static electricity// trying to pick a punchline randomly, taking various experiments// using scientifical mathmatical methods to pick the perfect weapon// taking simulations, evaulating its previous rotation// of thorough training which replicates the state// of trying to rape satan// takes phrases from the all time greatest// trying to work the calculations of what// made tupac and biggie famous// standing brainless, going decades without food for ages// needless to use pages, digi-equiped with wickadary spits// battleverses as its fists, heavy enough to codemn lisp// the arena's beginning musical procudure// have humaniods on the verge of a seizure// robots and flesh screaming like gladiators with ceasaur// (lol spelling) machine and man alike getting drunk and high// wasting on alchohal and diesiel// gates arise with the screech of weisel// i.r. baboon moving fuel consuming mechwarriors// bowing tech honours to the supercomputer battle holders// and all those who await, in front of the mechoniod games// will taste the blood - sweat - and pain............................... |
if i rated it: 7/10 because some of tha parts did not fit and there was no wordplay, only dictionary play, tha thing is u tried too hard to have advanced words, that took away from tha wordplay, hit ur head on a cloud, naomean?...
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great vocab
nice flow pretty good wordplay nice drop yo, i liked it keep droppin please check out my latest click on link in my sig peace! |
thanx for the feedback, uppin
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uppin
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you sacrificed flow for vocab
............with more flow and shit this spit would have been off the hook -insert |
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