tryin to elevate here, critique please
 

you better knuckle up and stop the key/
im about to punch you like muhammad ali/
im be knockin boots off ya moms own pussy/
these rhymes are tight in any city/
i collect the benjamins from what i made/
A+ is the shit i got for the grade/
knockin yo kicks off and lands you in the grave/
this shit i spit amazes you my rhymes you crave/
yo trojans skins broke cause you jumped too fast/
my rhymes knockinyou down it puts you in a coma and body cast/
my rhymes are so def i ran def jam out so bad russel simmons had to go over to murder inc./(no offense to def jam or simmons)
this nucker didnt know what to do so he got fucked/
he kept tryin to get on my dick cause he was a gay prostitute/
Gave this bitch the boot cause he tried to get a lawsuit/
he just another fruit through sexual ways/
i get this bitch confused like he lost in a maze/
this bitch had to go to the nurse cause my rhymes are too ill/
my rhymes kept him down so much he was held against his will/

Try rapping about a topic not just anything, because with a topic you can stay focused on one point and direct all of your attention to defining and making that verse on point ...

|[sMuRk]|

^^exactly

plus, work on ur metaphors and wordplay, jus continue to elavate until u hit ur head on a cloud...