A reason to bitch
 

A Reason to bitch.......

I began a life with you without thinkin it could result in death
Logicly the most stupid shit ive done to date i take a breath
as i explain to you that without love i couldnt live with this inflated chest
The realization of you bein the only one couldnt seep in
i didnt realize that doin that would send me off the deep end
Now im sittin hear expressin this broken heart
Players dont become the prey around these damn parts
So whyd i fall when you were apparently broken sharp
And you priked me without a warnin to my soul
I choked up some words among the few like a fools cold
Sold my soul to the devill when i tryed to fill up that hole
But you only fucked it up when you fucked my little bro
Life is shit when you cant get back on that horse
just realized this stallion is my kins v8 porsche
i turned to my rap book to let loose my feelins quick
tho it didnt help at all cuz i just needed a reason to bitch
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Re: A reason to bitch
 

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nice piece... I was feeling it... I'd gave it a 8/10, you could elevate on vocab and portray some darker feelings,... but it was a nice read over all. Sorry to hear bout yo broken heart, but I guess everybody goes thru that shit once in his/her life... keep ya chin up and keep dropping shit like this.
Much respected

^^ didnt really think it through that much just fucked around with wut i was feelin

What can I say? Broken hearts are all too common. And it's tough to try and express it. But you managed to express it.

By the way, I love your signature about Hip-Hop. It just seems all too true.

~Shalom~

iight

i liked this piece, it is a common used topic, broken hearts, something EVERYONE can relate to, and everyone can feel your pain

i think you did manage to make this a good piece, but better yet you let all your true emotions flow throu out this piece everywhere

my love

~Tera~
DONT HATE

yea...guess im musta just been feelin.. i got onna these i wrote..bout my 'olda' brotha...n muah ex as well...but yea...there was a coo flow...wordplay pretty nice...but the structure has been played.... nah mean......lol...at first i thought that you was a girl that wrote this...cuz get it.. a reason to bitch...sound like a female piece...heh

but not bad duke


igido

Love can be fleeting. Yet people in general remain stagnant (er, or something like that). And the 'effects' of that was shown here in a simple yet strong way. You kept fairly focused, got personal, rounded it off well enough.

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