Life Goes On(My Version) Need Replies...
 

Im Writing A Serious Song, And I Want My Girlfriend To Hear It...
We Just Broke Up After 17 Months, But I Know This Is A Huge Mistake....
I Need A Co-Writer, And Im Looking For An Audio Head To Help Me Out On Recording It, Like Have THem Record It, Cuz I Cant I Dont Have Any Programs....Please Help if You Can...I Have One Verse So Far....Tell Me What To Edit And Stuff..Thanks....All Help Is Really Appreciated... This Also Goes To Tupacs Beat "Life Goes On"

I Still Remember The Way You Looked At Me
Saw The Love In Yo Eyes, Like You Was Feelin Me
Love Aint Easy, But To Go On, You Just Gotta Believe
Baby, We Were So Close, I Could Feel Both Our Hearts Beat
You Brought Me Down, On My Knees, Just One Request, Please
Just Open Yo Eyes And See My Heart Is Locked And You Hold The Key
Im Still Standin, But Soon I Will Need Yo Shoulder
Cuz My Nights Are Getting Colder And Colder
With Our Age, We Are Getting Older And Older
I Have No Courage W/O You, I Need To Be Boulder And Boulder
We Spent So Many Nights Fallin Asleep On The Phone
I Dont Wanna Be Alone, Stuck Lookin At Yo Back, Yo Gone



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well its simple,u need alot more vocab,structure is good,i would say u need more creativity but on a played out topic u cant be very creative,although it lacks some things,the emotion is there and thats what counts.keep elevatin kid.~1~

Thank you....This is just a rough Sketch of my Song....
Thats why i need a Co-writer.... TO help out....

And i need an Audio Head to record for me......

Thank you

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iight man...i like ho its personal so you should be able to make something hot out of it...but dont try to go so hot..make it simple for her to understand...an really apreciate..for your first verse it was okie..but ive seen your work an you can complee something more valuble for her juz stay focused man...an take care..peace

Re: Life Goes On(My Version) Need Replies...
 

You are a freaking girl!

^Word., an Ugly Ass Dyke!

^^ sorry....I meant to say.....My friend asked me to write a song for his girlfriend and their situation......

I just need another co-writer

F U, Sir Eel. . Slik is hot!

^^ Man just shut up.....

Im just lookin for some help and replies on this peice....

i might collab with you on this,but this didn't seem like tha usual solid shit u be spittin,yo hit my new song up with some feed please.You lawyas give detailed critique.

Peace

^^ Word will do..........................

This was just a rough sketch..........................and theni m ognna edit