in the shadows
 

people dont see me cause im in the dark of the shadows/
unknown as the real shit that never shows/
im hardcore and vicious like eating bloody flesh/
out of so many victims that i unleash the pain and i cause messes/
come near me ill compact you up in different shapes/
circles, squares, rectangles, ovals, triangles and youll get verbally raped/
cause everytime some bitch challenges me to a battle/
i hit any bitch up just like a paddle/
i rip the core and trash you like black bags/
trash fags that hang them up all bloody like a flag/
i take anyone that wants to compete/
i dont cheat, i just throw bombs at him like tikrit/
my speed of the flow i speak is faster than racecars/
i leave scars and my rhymes get applauses/
that causes the losing tendency in in yo mind that creates mental pain/
im faster than a train comin faster in the lane grindin you by grain/
i aint playin with you fools cause im hidden in the shadows and dont come out in the open/
i stay hot and burnin and spittin rhymes im turnin/

it was alrite, nuttin special




that was nice though, keep elavting though

yo dawg try and throw more relevant vocab in your bars i.e use corresponding words o what ur talkin bout in your bars,sayin that it was descent,flowed well,descent topic,described pretty well,so jus try and spice it up a lil more with multies and more wordplay.

Could you drop some feedback on mine dawg.

Peace

YOU GOT POTENTIAL THAT IS ENOUGH TO KEEP DOING THIS STAY UP