Circus Freak
 

Stand there, hands barred, being stared at, glared, retreaing to the shadows, your lair/
Compensating for your losses, your spitten through gritted teeth at your various bosses/
You stand up and walk to te front, do a daily flip, daily money for that crued ariel stunt/
Your 3 feet tall with a purpose, want to be more then a freak, instead you in the circus/
Your skins getting cut by the razors edge, from past scars you see were you just bled/
It's night time and your screaming in your cage, rippin your hair out in a constant rage/
You ran away when you were 10, just you luck, herd screamin as you run, "YOU SUCK."/
You try to escape but you can't, it's either this or be an experiment at a suege plant/
No one pays their respects, if this was a world of freaks and geeks, you the top aspect/
Your scared cuz you lonely, look at the picture of your mom and she is your one and only/
She died six years ago, she was killed by a geek, now your stuck in the show, a Circus Freak/


There is another one, not that bad, improvment from my other one I tihnk. So let me get some feedback on this.

NICE STYLE NEED SOME BRUSHING UP BUT HOT

Thanks man, like I have said before I am only starting, got alot more hot shit to spit here sooner or later.

Uppin for feedback.

Uppin for some more feedback people, please let me really know what you guys thought.

yah i liked the cncept nice vocab, it was hot

Thanks a lot for the positive feedback.

Uppin for some more feedback.

i was feelin it, the style was kool, the structure was fine, the vocab was good, the wordplay was nice,and the concept was awesome. good post just keep elevatin and postin dude.