Emilies song (please check out) !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
 

I wrote this for my niece who was born last Sept. 11
with 3 holes in her heart....
GOD BLESS HER


The other day a new man was born
when they told me my life would be torn
Just when I thought a new light was found
A twist of fate brought it all to the ground

Oh god, What's this mean
What did she do to deserve this at a couple of week
Why not me she so innocent and sweet
This is Emilies song

8 years old in the back of our yard
I can see it now it doesn't seem far
By now, she can write and read
Most of all she's got everything she needs
She got love in her heart, and very big dreams
Of doin anything she can
For anyone that needs
Open arms, she's so perfect and sweet
This is Emilies song


At 18 years old she's goin out in the world
To show everyone who's waited
All the things she's learned
Now she's made it, through all the good and the bad
It's time for her to give
Everything she has.................


Bright white dress and a veil made of silk
It's time for me to get over the guilt
She's movin on to start a life of her own


She's so beautiful and sweet....

She's Emily
She's Emily
She's Emily

This was actually beautiful in it's heart wrenching simplicity.

Three holes, damn. Reminds me of my grandmother's foster daughter who was born with one hole in her heart. Thing is no one knew about it till she was fifty. Doctors said if she had ever of tooken up any sports, or even gave birth to a child, she would've died. I can only imagine what three holes might do to a person.

Anyway, love and peace brother.

~Shalom~

yo props on that i feel wut ur sayin

an extemely nice piece, it gives u tha feelin that life is fragile and can be made even more fragile from tha moment it starts, and not a naked eye can see that fact...

^bet he took alot of thought and time to reply^

iight

this here was nice, kinda like a lulaby, which is good.

sometimes it seemed like the words were only put in to ryme no other purpose, they didnt really fit it all that well, but it got better as it went on, didnt notice it so much

i felt emotion, and my eyes were never drifting off of this, and thinking about something else, kept my attention!

vocab wasnt all that great, could be upped a bit, but im glad you didnt just throw in a whole bunch of huge words that you dont even know what they mean.

flow started off sorta weak then worked its way up

like The Necromancer said Three holes, damn. I can only imagine what three holes might do to a person. but you helped me imagine it

my love

~Tera~
DONT HATE

Thanks for the feedback.......
I was actually trying to write from my brothers perspective
and try to envision what life would be like as she grew up...
I have some really nice music for this that I will probably post in the future.... Again, thanks for all the luv.............................


PEACE~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~>