This feeling
 

This feeling is greater than I thought it ever would be

Why do I get like this, why do I get this way

So sad and alone like never before

Love no true love has me feeling down

The fact life was perfect

Never on bad terms

Till the day I messed up

And hurt the one I love

By the worse means possible

One I never meant to do

I cheated on her

She said she has been hurt before

And she was fine

But I knew I screwed up

And it would never be right again

I knew the minute she found out

Her heart was ripped to shreads

The love that was there was now gone

I hurt her the worse way possible

And I wish I was dead

People say life is to short

And there are no regrets

This is one I will regret for life

Lost the love of my life

Cuz I couldn't just lay back

Couldn't say no, just went with it

Now i'm here sulking deeper and deeper

Just thinking how I messed up

And how I would never let it happen again

I feel so bad and i can't let it go

Still freinds after all this has happened

I'm sorry I hurt you, I'm sorry I let you down

iight

nice piece, does need some work, flow i found was kinda off when i read it outloud. and vocab needs to be upped

but the whole meaning of the piece made it that much better
it is a used topic but yours seemed to me a tad different, shone a new light

one part i liked about it was even thou she said things were okay that she'd been hurt before, you actually did pick up that what she said wasnt all true, maybe she wanted it to be the truth, but it wasnt, things changed.

try to paint me more of a picture thou next time, dig in deeper, use more emotion, pain, whatever your feeling to make ME feel it too. to stur up some emotions in me, by just reading this piece

my love

~Tera~
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