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tsheff112 09-10-03 12:53 PM

Off the top (1)...
 
I could spit another verse about how girls can be bitches,
Or I could make it even worse and rap about havin riches//
I could go on for a page about hangin with thugs,
And how I'm rappin and cappin, dappin with handfulls of drugs//
But that shit is played out like basketball up at the ruckers,
And furthermore I want to sound different then all of you fuckers//
I make a style that's strictly mine and copywright it within my rhyme,
Then I recite it one time and slide it into your mind//
Like take that, and spit it out just give it that feedback,
So I can feed that to my elevator, if you don't get it, just read it back//
Hope you enjoyed the flow that my mind popped off
Just a couple of random thoughts off the top//

Hit that up.

Laaate.

Verbatim 09-10-03 04:57 PM

nice drop
good flow, alright vocab

"But that shit is played out like basketball up at the ruckers,
And furthermore I want to sound different then all of you fuckers"

i liked that part the best out of this little rhyme
keep it up dawg,
peace

Alias-C 09-10-03 05:38 PM

Yo, I liked all this:
"I could spit another verse about how girls can be bitches,
Or I could make it even worse and rap about havin riches//
I could go on for a page about hangin with thugs,
And how I'm rappin and cappin, dappin with handfulls of drugs//
But that shit is played out like basketball up at the ruckers,
And furthermore I want to sound different then all of you fuckers//"
The rest... wasn't feeling it too much...
Got to admit, you came strong with it at first... but then kinda fell off at the half...
The first half had a nice flow and a good messege...
Dawg you could have kept this going... with that same lil formula as the first have... shit would have been way better...
Instead of kinda being cut-off, like if you gave it up and shit... lol...

Peace

tsheff112 09-11-03 12:07 AM

Good shot on that, and yeah, I did sort of fall off, but I got busy at work so I guess it's cut paste this shit back to the notebook for a rainy day...

Keep it comin...

Laaate.


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