The Dream
 

Words never spoken before
ooze from my tongue
Feelings suppressed so long
flood my days
Like birds I fly high
in touch with my inner worlds
Mountains move in me
and am easily overwhelmed
The girl I longed for
exist only in dreams
Cold days short days
stressful days and pain
After all that
I still stand to meet the one for me
The girl that finds comfort
in dreaming of me

this wasnt bad at all.

Reminds me of the movie .."Get Over It" tho when they were doing this whole Mid summer NIght's Dream, which is a play. There was this part where Kirsten Dunst had a solo and she sang "Dream of Me"...that was a touchy one.

Very much self explanatory. It was simple. Not all much to say about it. I like the metaphors u used. The intro was plain. It was short but its good.

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Uppun
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Words never spoken before (what could they be?)
ooze from my tongue (like blood?)
Feelings suppressed so long (drown a feeling)
flood my days (its a flood)
Like birds I fly high ( get lifted)
in touch with my inner worlds (thats twisted)
Mountains move in me ( atlas screams)
and am easily overwhelmed (or so it seems)
The girl I longed for ( is just a cunt)
exist only in dreams ( a dream is a want)
Cold days short days ( ya feel lonely)
stressful days and pain ( your not the only)
After all that (what comes next)
I still stand to meet the one for me ( sex is a hex)
The girl that finds comfort ( is the one)
in dreaming of me ( light without the sun)

my interpretation

iight

short, simple yet sweet, other words it was a good read, but not much to comment on. i liked to flow it had when i read it, maybe it was how i read it but it seemed to have a diff kinda flow to it

my fave part i dont know why cause its not that big of piece in it is

Cold days short days
stressful days and pain

it just jumped out right at me lol dunno why

~Tera~
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Very good. Short and to the point, got the message in the number of lines it took, and not to many. By the way, what the hell is that emde? I'm just wondering, i've never seen that done with an entire poem before.

peace

hmmmmmm normally i don't dissect poems here..............but this one was actually a thinker to me.............perhaps i read a little bit more into your lines.............first of all i think the "girl" in this piece may have been a bit of symbolism........as most of the theme seemed to be focused on more of a nature and it surroundings....maybe mother earth is the girl?................there is a nice flow to this and it has a overall gentle feeling to it..........soothing just a hint of emotion which lies under the surface.........regardless of your intentions with this piece it was a nice relief from the maddening deppresive anger we sometimes get into in Poetic Scriptures.............1

WOW!!! my 1st Poem and all this ppl showin LOve keep em coming am workin on my 2nd poem cuz i got to elevate in my poetic visions

Awwww I found this very sweet
perhaps "bittersweet" but sweet nonetheless
I really did feel the emotions you were putting
across in it....and I know cause my facial expressions
showed it while I was reading it lol
Good piece