What is Life
 

Hey guys, I think that this is probably my first TRUE poem, drop links, feedback, critiscism, and tell me what YOU think it's about, I'll PM you all with the actual answer, but I'm just curious as to see what you all think


What is life is the question I always ask
Without you it's nothing to me, I wished
I hoped, I dreamed for it to last
Friends, was what we were always until
My feeling shone true, for you,
they'll always be there too
Life is nothing without your sense of being
Without knowing that emotions exchanged,
they aren't in vein, love not wasted today
Heart torn apart re-sealed from lovers past
I promised I wouldn't hurt you, but you broke me
Like I was glass, I'm mad, no depressed
All these tears I shed, your the reason that I have wept
Life is nothing without you to be their right beside me
But you ignore me, destroy me, two words and it's like
my entire life you just ignored me
"We're not" is all it takes, and I forgot how I laid my head on you
Even if it is no longer there, my emotions will show for you
Cause I Love You

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^^if u want me to tell u wat i think life is read my shit esp. this one...

overall good piece, nice drop, i'd give it a 6/10...could've been betta cause it is tryin to answer tha greatest question of all time, one i ponder daily as anybody who reads my shit might know...but as a poem without a subjuct, u would've got a 8.5/10...

I don't care what its about, it's tight. I can't even think of anything to write about it. keep it up though

peace

hella lotta of emotion in this piece and i can't stress enough the importance of true emotion in poetry....................the flow was nice.......feels nice not to be confined to rhyming sometimes eh?............the subject i'll just say i disagree on the fact that love could be the meaning of life.............and no girl/guy could ever be worth the loss of life.....i.e. suicide...........as my homie Content says though all lyrics are poetry so i don't get the "true poem" comment but this was a decent heartfelt drop...............two thumbs up.................1