One verse...
 

Sorry y'all...I don't got much time so I can only type up one verse for now.

Verse 1:
I'm underground with a renowned found astound
Watch as I get to spittin' this profound sound
I'm the ant invadin' on your picnic ground
Unknown cat who knows his way around
I chew at a new crew like there's nothin' left to do
This a debut from an emcee who's long overdue
My words are true, they don't need a review
I'm in a whole 'nother league than you
I fly like a kite that's out of site, don't try to see my light
My knowledge is too bright, you'll lose your sight
All these chemicals mixed, now watch me ignite
There's a new star shinin' in the sky tonight
Who's the blame for callin' rap a game, they should be slain
It's full of blood, sweat and tears, but mostly pain
I can't explain the thoughts that enter my brain
As I continue my reign, I'll be the last to remain

Let me know what y'all think. UPPIN!

Hit me with some feedback!

i see ur potential kid. but on this verse u came kinda of shallow. talkin bout how nice u are. which may be true. but diversify ur shit. good looking

j dub that was a nice flow i feel you could have had some better vocab but dont get me wrong yo shit was on point

Thanks, I appreciate your oppinion

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UPPIN!

Come on y'all!

this was pretty ill,good structure,it was easy to read,easy to follow,u need more vocab and more multis,other than that this was ill,keep spittin.~1~

Thx...

More feedback plz...

it showed skill, no doubt...
it pretty much flowed all the way through...
had some multies... thas cool...
but it was pretty simple...
Pretty average vocab and all... and the topic... umm..... anyways... it was a keystyle, so that explains the simplicity...

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Thanks, I'll try to improve more next time.

the potential here is evident, however, the whole "like a kite, see my light" thing is very wack. i can't say it enough, USE MULTIS! it makes shit a lot more fun to read, as well as expand the vocab, always. but your structure and flow are on point, just elevate the lyrics and have a solid topic(other than yourself). amen. good on ya.

yea u definetly got potential, but uve got to elevate ur vocab, and multis. i thought ur topic was ok, as was wordplay. hold ur chin up kid just keep postin and elevatin and youll do fine.