it's been a while
 

i'm similar to a subliminal implant
with criminal intent, bent on destruction
corruption of young minds
plus mine at the same time
i'll say it twice, you'll pay a price
if you ain't nice, hate crimes on fake guys
the gay kind, "c'mon blunt play nice"
fuck that, i'm-a never double back on 'n'attack
i'm-a just inject a venom ta get um slumberin' fast
i'm bringin' thunder in raps
another hot track, bangin',
slangin' chronic on the side
a lyrical vomit,
causin' a mosh pit with all my rhymes
an' apologise is somethin' i'm-a never do
wouldn't you think this way if you were me
1, 2 an' 3 usually come in a succession
but i'm messin' shit up,
I'm changin' #1 to make it say BLuNT
'cause i'm infront, you trailin' behind
like the tail of a bitch pit bull tarrier
bullshit you a shitzu barely a species
why are you breathin'? let me fix that for you
maybe you is leadin' but i'm preachin' treason
a mutiny on yo-whole community, i don't need a reason
you just leavin' bleedin

short but sweet.. i liked the content.. an this rhyme here

if you ain't nice, hate crimes on fake guys
the gay kind, "c'mon blunt play nice"
fuck that, i'm-a never double back on 'n'attack
i'm-a just inject a venom ta get um slumberin' fast

that was cool...i think you could have made it longer though an brought some more intencity an structure...but it was good for a short read..later

Straigh FIYAH!!!! but longer is betta ~1~

i was feelin that, the vocab was good, content kicked ass, i do think it could have been longer, but for a short peice it was kool.

for a short piece IS REAL TIGHT,but if u make it longer im sure is gon be a HOT SHIT from u

hell yeah... it's been a while...
but damm, you could have made something longer than this...
It was cool I guess... I'm pretty sure it was keystyle, cause I've seen way better shit from you dawg...
You ain't really saying nothing new either...
But still, you showing skill... I liked the wordplay, and the verse flowed fine...

Peace

that flow was tight big ups nigga i wish it was a little longer my nigga keep writin nigga

yo, i made it longer but that was just somethin' quick... i figured i'd drop a l'il sumthin... u shud hear how it sounds.... fuckin' bangin.. lol... ne-way, props on all the respect... 1

tru it could of been a bit longer but other than that i think it was a hot piece,keep spittin.~1~

change your name.... that's the name of my crew.... how can you be a 1 man syndicate... ne-way... thanx

It has been a while..but yeah the flow seemed to be real complex

The content was good, vocab blah blah

Woulda sounded nice on audio...lol...just playin man

Overall-Good read

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nice wordplay, vocabulary, flow
work on strucure
All and all it was an ok verse...

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