My Shit Does Stink
 

Look i know i'm not the best here but wait
shook fools i shed a tear on my posts to date
posted up two battle versus in a faded state
call two hurses i think i already sealed my fate
early earthquakes my first few battles took place
from my birthplace i was ejected with a pencil
now in a work place i'm fed up with my rent so
i'm battling to improve who cares about a clean record
i'm earth shattering when i move but i'm even tempered
i'm pretty dissapointed in my first few appearences here
votes up in this muthafucka might take many many years
i have the urge to spit courage in words no one i fear
you have to feel that way or get no respect around here
fuck a win when i'm on my game get stuck under my pin
just make sure you get the fuck back up and try again
lyrically i might be labelled pencil thin pencil me in
as the next batter up i'll step to the plate frame thin
i came in to bring the pain so stay weary of my seemingly
weak frame i should try tag teaming caffeine is needing me
cus i need a win so bad it's like crack i'm fading a fad
to not hit back words i don't lack right now i carry a fatter bat//
(keystyle)

not bad, not gettin why you diss yourself about your own lyrics, but ok, anyway elevate your vocab and wordplay and keep spittin new shit, it'll elevate

^^^werd i dont know y u dissin yourself dude, but anyway the vocab was aight, the wordplay was ok, but just keep postin and ull get better, overall it was pretty good.