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1 boy
shots from dusk to dawn, he couldnt hold on
hidin in his closet, his soul was long gone he was to young, and drama has destroyed his mind family was outa line, lived his life on the grind till it was black and he was out, lights out in the park makin his move, till he got hit right out of counciousness and reality, and mind was out of gravity different pictures like different strokes, set back distractively noticed his life was wrong and now he doesnt live happily 15 grown droppin his chrome, gettin outa his zones made the right decision but now hes receivin blowes cuz hes got nowhere to go, and at home hes all alone drunks and child abusers, hes been beat dry to his bone he decides to change his ways, and meet on different sways weeks turned from days, then april turned to may though he was outa the game untill he was mentioned in breath monotones and dialect he was noticed gone police mentioned death found the next mornin, he was fine, jus distressed he was done with the whorin, but he was depressed as his age steadly inclined, he was released from the stress untill he was low on money and his momma need to pay her debts got back in the drug bizness and got back to wittnesed deaths and he remembered he liked how the gun blowes budda joints and the smell as the dough goes to help his mamma and with an unleashed bullet his life was stopped to an unexpected hult a shot square to his dome, left him useless to the unknown left him with his poor family, left him burried behind his home |
uppin for feedback
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that peice was pretty damn good i thouht. i thought the vocab kicked ass, the wordplay was aight, the content was awesome, and the topic was kool. keep postin dude i enjoyed readin that.
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thanx man, still uppin for feedback
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uppin for feedback, please give some feedback
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damn ppl still uppin for some damn feedback
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uppin for feedback god damn its been like 5 days
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i thought that peice was hella good. i thought the flow was on target, so i could follow it mentally. the vocab and wordplay were both good, and the content and topic was unique and original. good post man.
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=81167 thanx peace..... |
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