Bored and at school 4th Period
 

Im bored so ima type sum quik shit up...

Tha net game is way different than tha actual thing
So y'all niggaz on here sportin internet bling/
Wastin time on stupid shit and not gettin noticed
And bored as hell like I was when I wrote this/
Tha time has come for me to write for real
Lay my thoughts down and letcha know tha deal/
I dont need a ghost writer and I dont need to bite
That's why sum of u weak niggaz be soundin real tight/
Why dont u evacuate and just never return
And let tha feelin of u busted in ur mind just burn/
Think before you react to tha words I say
Let them boggle wit ur mind and leave ur fingers to play/
I'll admit... I write gangsta shit a lot
But when I write, its nothin more than just a thought/
I know the structures fucked up but y'know its fine
Cause Im talkin real shit... let it sink in ur mind/
I know Im not motivational speaker so dont talk
Instead stand up and from ur c.p.u., just walk/
Speaking openly on the way ppl act
To sum shit on tha net, U dont need to react/
1st time on here that i didnt write violent
Tha evil side of me... Suddenly... went si..lent/
I keep a steady pace and succeed in life
That leads to havin money and a workin wife/
This is my way of pointin out lames
That stay on tha net playin stupid ass games/
Period ended... and its time for me to be out
1 dawg... 1 love... and this one is out.../

Feedback on boredom.

1st time on here that i didnt write violent
Tha evil side of me... Suddenly... went si..lent/

easliy my fav line
overall this was good...since u talked about the structure i wont... the vocab was was good but could have been better... you should have wrote this during 4th, fixed it during 5th and droped it at lunch...

7/10 stay up

hot ish

I liked this shit a lot. Its cool how you can make a flow that fast and it can come up overall good. i thought the flow was real good and i really enjoyed the overall feeling of it.

ova all it wos o.k, but ya use of vocab could have been better, maybe movin away from 1 silable words. thought the message was abit weak.

I know but when im bored my vocab is kinda down. But thanx for ur feedback. Uppin.

O and Realist, my school is startin to act gay so i couldnt stay to fix it. Plus Ima do that in audio. Ima have it up this weekend. Check out sum of my audios on www.soundclick.com/wanteddoarecords. Tha oldest ones are at tha very bottom and my most recent ones are on the top.

forbein a lazy bastered it was good LOL just messin man, the vocab was alright the flow seemed a lil off at times but you made it work near the end a lil better, i think you should have added one or two multies in prolly wud'a made the concept come out a little more all in al man...good drop 7.5 peace...yo check my collab wit puglist..."my book of rhymes"

aight i'll check that out b4 i get offline. Uppin.

ill shit,came off nice,structure was off,vocab was aiight,easy to follow, good for boredom,keep spittin.~1~

Thanx for tha feed. D.S. Uppin.