heres some shit i wrote today
 

yo you fag stop tryin to suck for cum/
no matter how hard you try you wont get some/
i hate bitches that act like that/
they try to run all over causin amuck/
all they wanna do is look for someone to fuck/
they all homos and i dont mean sapien/
tryin to ride while someone is pissin/
i slap them and give them amnesia/
knockin them from one breath away from death so see ya/
these dumbass bitches want to inhale/
they fail cause they doin it from a male/
chokin and coughin while they spittin/
takin everything i written and they think they winnin/
took this bitch and snapped his neck into pieces/
i aint tryin to be "ludacris" or tight/
ill beat any fag in a fight/
come on bitch why dont you suck all you want/
ill just slit wrists and put you on the banned list/
heard this bitch chopped off his dick so he could be a female with some fuckin pussy/
cause this he/she is gay so he wanna fuck me/
if this fag had a baby the baby would be an it/
with no balls or cli who cant take a shit/
that right there aint a homosapien/
hes jus a homosexual alien/

man, sounds like you got some issues dog, it didnt flow, there was some kind of rhyme goin on, but not really, you used the same words over and over again, its just wack. It made no sense at all. I guess all i can say is elevate and work on your vocab.

^^ what he said...

you are getting better..but you have to pick up the pace kid...
the flow is getting better, the vocab is lacking and u did kinda use some words over

its that simple

smoked out it wasnt bad, it could have been better though but definetly not bad, and its not an issue for me im just sayin that about homos.