whats yo deal girl? (keystyle)
 

hook- whats yo deal girl, c'mon and tell me what you feel girl,
I'm real for real so tell me what you conceal girl,
go 'head and express whats on yo chest and confess whats yo deal girl....


yo,
We cant seem to go a single day without startin a conflict,
In this relationship you treatin me like a convict, I think your on shit,
cause you always buggin and bitchin bout something,
at first it was just huggin and kissin around fuckin,
but thats when all this shit hit the fan, you left me empty handed,
branded me with the label of not being a man.
You took the best part of me and departed without warning,
thats when I felt all of my emotions start stormin,
and all this commotion started swarmin,
all the emotion I've devoted was taken apart, manhandled and broken,
you emotionally hit me in the throat and caused me to start chokin,
I dont know what I said to set you off like bottle rockets,
But I've dug deep down in my pockets to buy you all them diamond rocks and shit.
So what am I to do when you leave me out the blue,
not believin any excuse I used, even if I was tellin you the truth,
see, I remained true to you even though the temptation was almost hard to bear,
I see you on the street and I'm tryin my hardest not to stare,
But my God I wanna be there, to hold you once more like before,
So to cut a long story short, in about thirty minutes or so, I'll be the one knockin on your door...


hook- whats yo deal girl, c'mon and tell me what you feel girl,
I'm real for real so tell me what you conceal girl,
go 'head and express whats on yo chest and confess whats yo deal girl....


just a quick keystyle on something I was feelin today... hit me up wit what yall think...
A.T.

i'll ad to this

whats yo deal girl, c'mon and tell me what you feel girl,
I'm real for real so tell me what you conceal girl,
go 'head and express whats on yo chest and confess whats yo deal girl....


it all fell apart by mistakes we done made,
and at times i reminis,
on how we use to kiss in the shade//
but it's all gone and it all starts to fade,
i never had much but it was love that i gave//
and when i messed up it was u who forgave,
yet now i got to stand tall and be brave//
as i pass hard times like the days of a slave,
in thoughs lonely hot summer days//
yet know that i'll always be here,
like a tree in the woods just passin its fear//
and my passion burns deep as i slowly shed a tear,
and my love burns bright and soon will be clear//

whats yo deal girl, c'mon and tell me what you feel girl,
I'm real for real so tell me what you conceal girl,
go 'head and express whats on yo chest and confess whats yo deal girl....


i just felt as if it was only right that i add theses 6 bars to it

its cool...

aiyo... STILL UPPIN!!!!!

Ok... ok... ok.... I get the hint... I'm a newbie that cant flow...
right??????????

STILL UPPIN

yo that was pretty good.....the flow was aight, the wordplay was good, the vocab was where it needed to be, and overall that peice pretty much kicked ass for a keystyle, i was feelin it.

and yo, thanx for postin a reply on my post
peace.....

This shit was straight, ok hook, and descent flow, but all tha open mics i be readin with a descent topic is all bout negative shit tha way i read your hook gave me tha impression dat it was about a gurl dat you fuckin but instead to turned out to be about all da bad shit dat happened.
~1~

thanx fo' da feed yall...
uppin

this is like what I was going through i was so tempted to add on I hope you dont mind..

whats yo deal girl, c'mon and tell me what you feel girl,
I'm real for real so tell me what you conceal girl,
go 'head and express whats on yo chest and confess whats yo deal girl....

Never Call Back Making Our Future Seem Like A Lost Fact//
I Never Hurt You Love Is One Thing We Didn't Lack//
What Happened To A Few Weeks Ago//
All We Had Was High's Now We're Just Riding On Lows//
If I Could Rap To A Beat I Would Make Sure It Was Slow//
Feel My Words Of Forgiveness I'm Not Your Regular Joe//
What Happened To Us? We Had Love Now Look At This//
It Seems Just Trying TO Hang Out With You Is A Cuss//
I Call When I Know Your Away Just To Hear Your Voices Sweet Tune//
Just Hoping One Day It Will Be Back To Say I Love You..//

nice nikka,... c'mon peeps.. add on

yo you should repost this with the new verses added and they can critique the whole thing it be like a big collab